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ERASED MEMORY The rope feels rough Bloodstained fingers Loop both ends A glass bulb alike Enlightening How fitting I chuckle Amazed Nothing Nothing remains But two ends Alpha Omega Me You And nothing in between But distance Whirling mist That slowly but securely Erases memory And facial expression If I jump now So low Will my memory Be erased in yours? December 27, 2017 Take care. See you all soon hopefully!

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Space Cadet

Date: 1/4/2017 6:26:00 AM

Sir. So well written with carefully chosen, robust words packed with meaning. -- Wesley C

Darren White
Date: 1/4/2017 7:05:00 AM

Wesley! Thank you for seeing that. Every word was weighed and placed carefully in each position.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/28/2016 1:16:00 PM

Very powerful writing, liked this!

Darren White
Date: 12/29/2016 12:06:00 PM

I really am glad you can appreciate it! :)

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/27/2016 3:01:00 PM

My friend, when you return I will be glad. Ropes rough, if they ever get smooth, is that really any good? Things being burned away, stripped off, the furnace of truth ah well I am just saying things. Good luck, Darren.

Darren White
Date: 12/29/2016 12:06:00 PM

I understand Doug. Will manage and be back soon!

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 12/27/2016 1:10:00 PM

Gives me goose bumps. See you soon.

Darren White
Date: 12/29/2016 12:04:00 PM

I promise to be back soon, Kai. With inspiration for new poems

Tim Smith

Date: 12/27/2016 8:24:00 AM

I can sense fear or is it a tiredness of the same routines...My prayers are with you my friend.

Darren White
Date: 12/29/2016 12:03:00 PM

Thank you my friend. Not home yet, but getting energy again for new poems. This one is dark, but I love it nonetheless.

Chris Green

Date: 12/27/2016 6:22:00 AM

There is a deep loneliness in this and a question at the end that I am sure is desperate for an answer though there are better ways of fining that out. Very sad Darren, this one hurt to read because it was so well written.

Chris Green
Date: 12/27/2016 7:26:00 AM

Ok, we'll be thinking about you.

Darren White
Date: 12/27/2016 7:25:00 AM

Hospital for a little while.

Chris Green
Date: 12/27/2016 7:22:00 AM

Go?

Darren White
Date: 12/27/2016 7:17:00 AM

Thank you for saying it's a good poem. I will be alright again, when I am back I will be :) Time to go, take care!

Probir Gupta

Date: 12/27/2016 5:17:00 AM

vivid images ... intellectually rich communication ... existential confusion ...

Darren White
Date: 12/27/2016 6:18:00 AM

Thank you for the kind words, Probir :)