En Passant

between the space of “aim” and “fire” is the place I least desire life, in here, is infinitely small in this space, we are nothing at all and if I am fire and you are aim then the space between is our disdain rook and pawn their blood devour the space between, a burning tower hate and love, infinity the space between, a stagnant sea a policeman knocks with lowered gaze the silent space, infernal blaze life and death, eternal story beset by haunting purgatory breath inspire, breath released a breath withheld, is a breath deceased space infliction rogue design let’s rearrange this paradigm compression rate initiate death and life amalgamate

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Joe Maverick

Date: 1/18/2024 3:09:00 PM

A parodixical amalgum of text here Mat..And yet I Read..Read of angst..Of realisation.' And a desire To grasp..True reality.! real quality the very Ore 'as it were' of eternity.. The breath of Divinity is pursued by your lines.' You hunger For explanation i feel in this piece' much thought Is placed in word choice.' In the end though freedom is dispensed..It cannot be attained, In the true sense..We must open our being and You are on that journey..Be well' stay inspired!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/18/2024 9:01:00 PM

stay inspired as well and i will certainly dig back through your extensive archive (making stops along the way) in search of this poem's doppelganger (if not in content then at least in spirit)

Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/18/2024 9:00:00 PM

again, an articulate and thoughtful response that speaks to the essence of journey as being just that, the essence of truth itself as something that is not the means to an end but rather the immutable continuum of possibility -

Joe Maverick
Date: 1/18/2024 3:12:00 PM

I chose this to read as i did a Write some seasons ago titled The same.'

Maria Williams

Date: 1/8/2024 10:57:00 PM

This is a powerful poem; the slightly dark edge to it grabs the reader's attention. I was intrigued from beginning to end. So well written...Maria

Mat Ignacio
Date: 1/9/2024 7:39:00 PM

thank you maria

Paige Hind

Date: 12/27/2023 7:51:00 PM

This was very wise, like your soul, seems mature...and experienced. I truly enjoyed reading this. Dark, but very powerful...

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/27/2023 7:57:00 PM

a thoughtful comment

Hiya Sharma

Date: 12/26/2023 7:59:00 PM

Woah,firstly I'm going to save this in my FAVs, what a profound and magnificent write which so effortlessly explores the dimension of 'space' between various contradictory emotions..This whole poem captivated my attention and compelled me to ponder on these deep thoughts that you've so marvelously compiled in this poem."and if I am fire and you are aim then the space between is our disdain","breath inspire, breath released, a breath withheld,is a breath deceased" Truly one of my favs from you!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/26/2023 8:03:00 PM

my deepest gratitude to you

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 4:43:00 PM

powerful words, especially the first line. It grabbed my attention immediately. I love the paradoxes you created like this one: hate and love, infinity the space between, a stagnant sea Imaginative and creative write. Faving this one, Sara xnj

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/26/2023 7:14:00 PM

my appreciation

Di11y Da11y

Date: 12/26/2023 12:06:00 AM

Incredibly powerful first line - which had me held in the moment before action, action that cannot be undone. Perfect poetic line which snatched my mind and transported elsewhere with immediacy - very well done

Mat Ignacio
Date: 12/26/2023 7:14:00 PM

thank you, take care