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Embers of a Memory--Dad's Song

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Our hands and our feet were warmed from the cold, while the campfire burned into embers and coal The song that he whispered combined with the sparks, and drifted away, to be lost in the dark Splinters of light outlined his shape, and hollowed the lines in his face. With fingertips calloused, he strummed his guitar into the solace of night. We gathered to listen, and gathered our tears, with smoke in our eyes and our hearts compromised. The song told the fable of babes lost in the woods who had wandered away on a bright amber day. Where the robins of red, so gingerly spread green strawberry leaves to cradle their graves Crickets, like orphans awakened from rest, lamented with sorrow from pine-needle nests This legend was saved, but others were lost, tossed to the wind, like ghost-feathers of ash. My father is gone, but the song lingers on remembered tonight, from a night in the past The wind still unfolds the song to the night whispering words that make robins cry Drifting through the trees and taking me home Still stoking the embers of a mid-summer's moon ________________________________________________________

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Date: 9/1/2018 2:22:00 PM
I got goose bumps thinking of those "stories told by the campfire" memories. Beautifully written and formatted Carrie. Thanks for participating in the contest
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Date: 1/25/2018 3:03:00 PM
Touching the soul.
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Date: 1/25/2018 7:52:00 PM
Hello old friend ! It was so kind of you to comment on three of my poems today, and it made my day !! I've been away from the Soup for quite awhile, and it lifted my spirit to think I've not been forgotten! I hope all is well with you, and that the New Year so far is good to you and your family. As one who always excels in nostalgic poetry Hope you are still writing about the 'good old days'....we both know they were the best ! Thank you for stopping by to see me !! :)
Date: 8/18/2016 6:53:00 PM
Love the line "lyrics drifted through trees like ghost feathers of ash". Vivid imagery, lovely poem.
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Date: 8/17/2016 8:52:00 PM
That's what good memories are for. Love these two lines, "His song disappeared, of the robins that lay green strawberry leaves to cover the graves..." Congrats! :-)
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Date: 8/17/2016 1:51:00 PM
Carrie, so remarkably beautiful lovely lady...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest! :)-luloo
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Date: 8/5/2016 8:42:00 AM
Wonderful write and great win
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Date: 8/3/2016 2:18:00 PM
Carrie, congrats on your placement with this amazing poem lady! :)-luloo
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Date: 8/3/2016 9:07:00 AM
A good idiom here Carrie, nicely expressed.
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Date: 8/3/2016 8:43:00 AM
Embers of a memory --such a pleasant sounding phrase. Placement congrats! :-)
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Date: 8/3/2016 8:31:00 AM
Beautiful idiom, congratulations Carrie
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Date: 8/3/2016 8:20:00 AM
Absolutely beautiful,congrats Carrie!
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Date: 8/3/2016 7:42:00 AM
This poem is truly a work of art. The pictures and sounds created by your words are incredible – I read it several times in considering the placement. This fit the theme perfectly by flowing seamlessly from the literal process to the figurative meaning of your idiom. Congrats on your 2nd place win in the Create an Idiom contest!
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Date: 7/31/2016 2:36:00 PM
so profound and exceptional poetry, you take one there Carrie.
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Date: 7/29/2016 9:37:00 PM
So lovely and heartfelt. I lost my Daddy and truly felt this ... CayCay
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Date: 7/27/2016 1:45:00 PM
This reads like a painting and a memory and a song. Here is the perfect example of art put to words, simple yet complex. The uncommon word paring of scented grief, of burning weighted words, of ghost feathers of ash---and much more. I'm left to read this again and again...truly a eulogy of peace and love, at least to me.
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Date: 7/27/2016 10:22:00 AM
Carrie, beautiful lady..good luck in the contest! :)-luloo
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