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Elements Part 4 - Fire

Stars In My Heart Free from pain, he lay aloof and still on the bier I saw him sleep motionless with no trace of fear Recanting the prayers after the village priest-head Eyes lowered I sniffled and dropped my heavy head Sandalwood logs and incense were placed above him Saline tears kept dripping down as all looked so grim The crackling red flames shot arrows to heaven's bed When pyre was kindled to bid farewell to the dead His soul with fire danced in celebration But our souls were charred and ashen as dad moved on In a pensive mood I reflected on fusion Of bonds and connections that bind us to love on The inferno brought me out of this delusion Of nothingness, but stars in my heart to live on May 1, 2016 Elements Parts 4 - Fire For Brian Davey 12 syllables in each line

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Date: 5/9/2016 6:46:00 PM
Beautiful flow to your write, and wonderful imagery.
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Date: 5/4/2016 5:14:00 PM
Enjoyed the visual of sandalwood logs and incense. Congratulations!
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Date: 5/5/2016 1:09:00 PM
Thanks Kim!
Date: 5/4/2016 11:48:00 AM
Very well written poem, Balveen - exactly as it happened at my dad's funeral. Congrats on your win. ~karam~
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:22:00 PM
Thanks Karam!
Date: 5/4/2016 9:49:00 AM
Congratulation on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:28:00 PM
Thanks Devnath!
Date: 5/4/2016 4:03:00 AM
I just loved the theme you wrote this in Balveen! A ode to the rites of passage in paganism, great job and congratulations
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:25:00 PM
Thanks Brian for your appreciation!
Date: 5/2/2016 8:19:00 AM
YOU SHOULD BE PROUD OF THIS SONNET. It is certainly a very fine sonnet, that was a pleasure for me to read this beautiful morn. Solid 7 and good luck in that contest..
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Balveen Cheema
Date: 5/4/2016 12:27:00 PM
How kind, Robert! Thanks!

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