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Electricity

Electrical power surges through my body, sending high voltage waves to my brain, shocking me to my core. The beats are pulse pounding. Raw energy flows through my veins. Flashes of rhythm like a neon sign, glowing out from the darkness. Lightning strikes of pure power, raging into fire. Flames amplified by octane. Burning away my soul, until the smoke rises. And I am lost in it. Written by: Kelly Deschler October, 14, 2013 For Nette Onclaud's contest - Groove It! Heavy Metal

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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 6/3/2014 5:59:00 AM

this rocks!!!!! i feel the heat and intensity increasing with each line.. :)!!!! i like it..... :)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 6/4/2014 5:25:00 PM

Thank you very much for stopping by, Olive. It's so cool that you felt the electricity of this poem! :)

Ivo Cos

Date: 5/23/2014 4:20:00 PM

Very admirably depicted write on Electricity. I somewhat felt eels nearby while reading this, which is very good because the imagery was very real and effective. Loved this Poem.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/25/2014 3:01:00 PM

Thank you so much, Ivo. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.... This poem was written on the theme of music, and I chose heavy metal. The description of electricity is how I feel when I listen to that kind of music. I'm glad that you felt it, because that was what I hoped would happen when people read this!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/6/2014 4:10:00 PM

A refreshing take on the topic! fav [line flames amplified by octane ]Light & Love

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/8/2014 5:24:00 PM

Thank you, Debbie! I am glad that you enjoyed this one.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 12/15/2013 6:25:00 PM

This poem has the power and passion of eletricity, WOW I felt the emotion in this write great job. and yes i do love father christmas lol. cheri

Robin Davis

Date: 12/15/2013 1:03:00 PM

Kelly This is an electrifying and charged up write. You sent a lot of energy and power through every line. Better not get too close to you or I might get shocked. LOL Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Others Misery poem Hugs

Skat A

Date: 10/30/2013 12:25:00 PM

Kelly, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

Christopher Thor Britt

Date: 10/28/2013 10:13:00 PM

Raw power in your words, refined nicely in poetry. Nailed it! CTB

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/28/2013 11:58:00 AM

Hi Kelly... congratulations on your win...LINDA

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/28/2013 10:20:00 AM

And we are lost in the lines, of a smokin' hot poem........love it, Kelly!! Congratulations!!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/28/2013 7:51:00 AM

Congrats on the win in the contest, kelly

Sandra Adams

Date: 10/27/2013 8:29:00 PM

I could feel the vibrations...congrats on your win :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/17/2013 4:16:00 PM

electrically beautiful piece

Ifeanyi Bob Ekechukwu

Date: 10/17/2013 4:01:00 PM

Wow excellent poem with deep meaning. Thanks for your noble visit and congrats on your win. Love n hugs

Poet Tacito

Date: 10/17/2013 9:39:00 AM

Excellent! I condone a strong Metal sound. Love the ending!

Honestly J.T.

Date: 10/17/2013 2:50:00 AM

Love the mental image. Good job

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/17/2013 1:55:00 AM

thank you, kel.. SOUP MAIL!..:) huggs

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/15/2013 6:26:00 PM

Interesting work..Enjoyed reading your contest entry this eve..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments were uplifting..Sara

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/15/2013 11:05:00 AM

Oh you sure Rock, this is amazing visual poetry.....

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/15/2013 12:08:00 AM

yes!!! This would certainly be heavy metal!!! Way to go electric.

John Posey

Date: 10/14/2013 7:16:00 PM

You have perfectly described the untamed side of such power. Control elements can render such power beneficial to artists and engineers.... I suspect you have witnessed both..... Great work, as usual... Hugs, dear one.... Jake

Johnny Rhinem

Date: 10/14/2013 6:20:00 PM

† Wow, You Know I Was Listening Unto A Crowded Soccer Stadium's Vibrant Spectators As Fans A Couple Of Evenings Past Now, Sweet Precious Kelly ˜ My Spirit Felt This Wisp In Wind So To Speak ? Somewhat Ominus Towards These Darker Elements Amid Humanity Likened As Unto Her Energy Within A Lightning Bolt ? Similar Unto A Heavy Metal Etc., Rock Concert Or Even Perhaps The Coliseum During Ancient Rome's Gladiator Bouts ? Also, I Had A Profound Dream A Bit Back Of Such Power Divine * Ten Trillion Times Multiplied ˜ Love, John