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Electrical power 
through my body,
sending high voltage waves
to my brain,
shocking me
to my core.
The beats 
are pulse pounding.
Raw energy 
my veins.
Flashes of rhythm
like a neon sign,
out from the darkness.
Lightning strikes
of pure power,
raging into fire.
Flames amplified by octane.
Burning away my soul,
until the smoke rises.
And I am lost in it.

Written by: Kelly Deschler
October, 14, 2013
For Nette Onclaud's contest - Groove It!
Heavy Metal 

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  1. Date: 6/3/2014 5:59:00 AM
    this rocks!!!!! i feel the heat and intensity increasing with each line.. :)!!!! i like it..... :)

    Deschler Avatar Kelly Deschler
    Date: 6/4/2014 5:25:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you very much for stopping by, Olive. It's so cool that you felt the electricity of this poem! :)
  1. Date: 5/23/2014 4:20:00 PM
    Very admirably depicted write on Electricity. I somewhat felt eels nearby while reading this, which is very good because the imagery was very real and effective. Loved this Poem.

    Deschler Avatar Kelly Deschler
    Date: 5/25/2014 3:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you so much, Ivo. I'm happy that you enjoyed it.... This poem was written on the theme of music, and I chose heavy metal. The description of electricity is how I feel when I listen to that kind of music. I'm glad that you felt it, because that was what I hoped would happen when people read this!
  1. Date: 1/6/2014 4:10:00 PM
    A refreshing take on the topic! fav [line flames amplified by octane ]Light & Love

    Deschler Avatar Kelly Deschler
    Date: 1/8/2014 5:24:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thank you, Debbie! I am glad that you enjoyed this one.
  1. Date: 12/15/2013 6:25:00 PM
    This poem has the power and passion of eletricity, WOW I felt the emotion in this write great job. and yes i do love father christmas lol. cheri

  1. Date: 12/15/2013 1:03:00 PM
    Kelly This is an electrifying and charged up write. You sent a lot of energy and power through every line. Better not get too close to you or I might get shocked. LOL Nice job Thanks for the awesome comment on my Others Misery poem Hugs

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:25:00 PM
    Kelly, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 10:13:00 PM
    Raw power in your words, refined nicely in poetry. Nailed it! CTB

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 11:58:00 AM
    Hi Kelly... congratulations on your win...LINDA

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 10:20:00 AM
    And we are lost in the lines, of a smokin' hot it, Kelly!! Congratulations!!

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 7:51:00 AM
    Congrats on the win in the contest, kelly

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 8:29:00 PM
    I could feel the vibrations...congrats on your win :)

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 4:16:00 PM
    electrically beautiful piece

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 4:01:00 PM
    Wow excellent poem with deep meaning. Thanks for your noble visit and congrats on your win. Love n hugs

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 9:39:00 AM
    Excellent! I condone a strong Metal sound. Love the ending!

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 2:50:00 AM
    Love the mental image. Good job

  1. Date: 10/17/2013 1:55:00 AM
    thank you, kel.. SOUP MAIL!..:) huggs

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 6:26:00 PM
    Interesting work..Enjoyed reading your contest entry this eve..Thanks for the visit to my page..Your comments were uplifting..Sara

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 11:05:00 AM
    Oh you sure Rock, this is amazing visual poetry.....

  1. Date: 10/15/2013 12:08:00 AM
    yes!!! This would certainly be heavy metal!!! Way to go electric.

  1. Date: 10/14/2013 7:16:00 PM
    You have perfectly described the untamed side of such power. Control elements can render such power beneficial to artists and engineers.... I suspect you have witnessed both..... Great work, as usual... Hugs, dear one.... Jake