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Echoes in the Abyss

I'm a pearl in a seashell, but for the world, nothing Just like those stars, which at a full-moon night, are nothing. As wind deceives a little leaf, it falls down dancing on the mud, others play clarion, it gets nothing Heard that the shine of your Gazelle eyes embarrassed the Moon last night, for in front of you her light was nothing I dream to walk on sand hand in hand beneath the stars Watch the dawn at shore, but my dreams to you are nothing Your love for me should've been enough for me O’ Lord But my cravings for more always lead me to nothing In desert I walk, follow a track apart from all But instead of Oasis, it takes me to Nothing Death could be our mother to the other world, but we can't be gods there either______all this Labor for nothing Now you stand here Paghunda, confuse, melancholic In the middle of Abyss, in center of nothing ___________________________

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Date: 2/9/2024 11:41:00 AM
What a wonderful expansion on "nothing," Paghunda. This is a marvel of poetic craftmanship on the theme with a twist as the end of each line. Wonderfully done. Congratulations on your win. Blessings!
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Date: 2/7/2024 5:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 9/25/2020 3:16:00 AM
Nothing is but a great work of beauty and depth! I so much enjoyed the way you displayed your inner thoughts unveiling a remarkable human soul and a world of wonders and mysteries that is an iota in front of what is beyond our power and control.. a great Ghazal! I enjoyed reading your poetry, Paghunda! My warmest wishes. Regards and blessings.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 11/2/2020 7:50:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment Bisma
Date: 9/18/2020 11:03:00 PM
Deep thoughts presented beautifully, Paghunda:)
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 1/8/2021 2:30:00 AM
Cheers Jo
Date: 9/12/2020 9:52:00 AM
These are not so easy to write but you have done a good job. Reads like a good contender for the contest. I always have to go back to instructions on the proper way to write many forms because my memory fails me now. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/20/2020 2:07:00 PM
We both are sailing the same boat Sara :) Though I am young but my brain is quite old lol. I have started writing for contests lately, because these contests not only inspire you to pen something, but also they make you try a different form. We are learning a lot you see. Purpose is not to win, but to learn. One day (like somewhere in 2080), I will become a great poet lol. Thank you!
Date: 9/5/2020 1:26:00 AM
Pagunda, I still have not tried mine and I truly love this poem but never having written one, I don't quite know what is expected of us. Having said that, I think yours sounds brilliant and I a am crossing fingers and toes for a win, you certainly deserve one my friend, Blessings, and hugs, Jennifer. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/20/2020 2:08:00 PM
Thanks Jef
Date: 9/4/2020 1:38:00 PM
wow, amazing ghazal-ing!! For me a FAVE
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/20/2020 2:10:00 PM
Thanks
Date: 9/2/2020 9:24:00 PM
A beautiful Ghazal! Best wishes for the contest. :)
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/20/2020 2:09:00 PM
I reciprocate the same to you
Date: 9/1/2020 2:09:00 PM
You get an 'A' for going for it, Paghunda! Here's to a win for you in the contest too! Keep the Faith, Gershon
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/18/2020 1:04:00 PM
Didn't write it for a win. But wanted to try this form for a long time. Thanks to the sponsor for making me write this piece. Anyway thanks a lot. Be blessed!
Date: 9/1/2020 11:47:00 AM
at times we don't appreciate the stars in front of your eyes cuz we are blinded by the moon, Nicely written gl in the contest dear pot.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/4/2020 10:05:00 PM
Yeah, you are right. The same stars which amaze you often at night, won't even get your attention in the presence of a full moon, they are almost invisible.
Date: 9/1/2020 11:24:00 AM
Love this creation. I f'ind it quite beautiful! I constantly doubt my Poetry. Keep going at it, you're more than good! Panagiota
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/4/2020 10:02:00 PM
Thanks :)
Date: 8/31/2020 11:23:00 PM
A non-poet hey? What i read in front of me now, is poetry, wonderful poetry.
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/2/2020 8:02:00 AM
Haha if you say so... Thanks!
Date: 8/31/2020 5:24:00 PM
Loved your Ghazal - it's excellent! Your poem has the essence of ghazal, which is usually love, longing, and loss. Thanks for a beautiful one!
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Paghunda Zahid
Date: 9/2/2020 8:01:00 AM
Thanks Malabika.

Book: Shattered Sighs