Easy Wit

Note happy find where choice greets poise, Observe the spree of cheer that springs; Word poignant mind with vibrant voice. Etch thus plenty that ever flings, Allow sure heart to gather more; Surplus peace flows to niche good times, Yes see joy start from soul's deep core. Work primal glow in simp,e rhymes, Impress true feel with groovy dance; Think and feel good here on the way. Play now reveals a vivid chance, Unleash fresh moods that fund grand pay; Nurture the touch of zesty feel, Stillness brings much as blessings thrill. Leon Enriquez 21 September 2016 Singapore

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Keith Logan

Date: 9/22/2016 6:06:00 AM

Feel 3 times in 5 lines seems somewhat excessive. Maybe; Impress true touch with groovy dance and Nurture the touch as zest distills, or something similar.

Leon Enriquez
Date: 9/22/2016 11:37:00 AM

Dear Keith: Thank you for the constructive comments. Yes, I will re-visit this poem on another occasion. I wrote this piece at 1:20am and I think my thoughts were a bit muddled. Worth doing some re-work soon. Leon

Keith Logan
Date: 9/22/2016 6:07:00 AM

I see I have fallen into a similar trap using touch twice but hopefully I still have a valid point.