Dusk

Dusk settled on light green trees Timid mongoose peeped Padded feet in the alley Cool breeze thru leaves seeped It started to feast On old canned fish and stale meat Stars twinkles in east 27/9/12 BY-Tahera Mannan Contest- Wonder Of Dusk In Seguidilla

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/27/2012 5:32:00 PM

wow, this is very lovely and I liked the realism thrown in with the old canned fish for that mongoose.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/27/2012 8:58:00 AM

A VIVID CANVAS PAINTED WITH IMPRESSIVE IMAGERY TAHERA .. WINNING WISHES LUV ..

Kash Poet

Date: 9/27/2012 4:22:00 AM

Very good approach for Nette's contest.A great entry Tahera.Best wishes to you.

Robert Pettit

Date: 9/26/2012 11:34:00 PM

I would hardly consider a mongoose a "timid" animal. They are quick, cunning, and vicious predators who will take on a snake that's many times their weight. However, this is a decently descriptive free verse poem.