Duplex

red of wrath dusk jams the light, her teeth gnashing from wrath pierced by deceit... rage bangs on walls; cut-glass slitting inside vile mouth lashed with falsehood— his lies about lust’s tryst masked, hushed... she pants, tongue’s fire explodes just like boiled veins curdling until, raw flash growls on, “YOU SCUM— wolf for harlots!" torn wife bleeds red. ~ Duplex Contest For Jan Allison 11.08.2016

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Darren White

Date: 12/10/2016 11:56:00 PM

Wow Nette, symbolic or true, the ferocity jumps at you... Congratulations!

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/10/2016 8:06:00 PM

Hi Nette, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/10/2016 7:54:00 PM

Coming back with congrats!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/10/2016 6:30:00 PM

I love the way you formatted this very descriptive poem Nette :-) I am delighted people took time to have a go at the contest and it filled so quickly:-) Many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2016 6:21:00 PM

I'm not sure it was really murder, was it, Nette? I am wondering if all the red blood images, etc were symbolic only. Anyway, it was VERY descriptive. Most descriptive I think I have read for this contest.

Janis Thompson

Date: 12/7/2016 9:48:00 PM

I see clearly what is going on in this relationship. Great write, nette. Should be a winner I predict.

Space Cadet

Date: 12/7/2016 9:37:00 PM

Wow. Bruising, cold, and venomous image(s) with just enough words to emote your message. Great work. Thank you for sharing. -- Wesley C.

Daniel Turner

Date: 12/7/2016 5:15:00 PM

Quite vitriolic, nette. Banging on walls,cutting glass, vile mouth, I shutter to think.

Doug Vinson

Date: 12/7/2016 3:29:00 PM

Whew...Wow... "boiled veins curdling" and "cut glass slitting" - these are choice cuts of language. Hot with rage and sad violence, great poetry.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 12/7/2016 2:06:00 PM

- .... powerful and great written, Nette - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/7/2016 1:48:00 PM

Nette, that really shows it . Good luck in the contest!

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/7/2016 1:31:00 PM

Nice one, Nette! the two syllable form gives it a breathless quality, the anger gets through really well. Good luck in the contest.

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/7/2016 1:03:00 PM

WoW! Nette, this is good. I could feel the angst, hurt and deceit. Well done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. A without a doubt seven:-) Alexis

Tim Smith

Date: 12/7/2016 12:37:00 PM

Great nette...I like how each line has its own emphasis.

Chris Green

Date: 12/7/2016 12:35:00 PM

Wow Nette, this was so good. The anger was felt and the betrayal hurt. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.