Drip

Drip Drip drip Slowly dripping Joined in a pool of sand As we chase empty dreams Fearful hearts sliced into ribbons Our life blood is sifting from our veins For pyramid contest, flip and read bottom to top. By:Richard Lamoureux June 6th 2014 for Nette's contest.

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Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/12/2014 11:16:00 PM

Nicely done Rick... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/13/2014 8:41:00 AM

Thanks again Verlena.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 6/12/2014 7:58:00 AM

Another great poem from you! Love the line "joined in a pool of sad" The joining part is what resonates with me. When people connect, they can lift each other up and rise from the pool.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/12/2014 8:36:00 AM

Isn't that connecting wonderful! Thanks for taking time to read my recent poems. Have a great day Monterey.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/9/2014 5:22:00 AM

Didn't get any happier reading it backwards. But a great piece of writing none the less. Best of luck with the comp.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 7:47:00 AM

Ha ha, thanks Scott, your response certainly has made me happier.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/8/2014 10:06:00 PM

Very cool Richard! Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 7:47:00 AM

Thanks Debbie.

Chris Boskovski

Date: 6/8/2014 5:26:00 PM

Wow Richard, nice write, very powerful, I love the last line, gave me chills! I love it! Great write, and good luck in the contest! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2014 6:43:00 PM

Thanks Chris.

Joseph Sergi

Date: 6/8/2014 4:20:00 PM

Richard nice write Good Luck in the contest!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/9/2014 7:48:00 AM

Thanks Joseph.

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 6/8/2014 12:51:00 PM

This is a nice poem and great for the contest. Have a blessed day.... Lucilla

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/8/2014 6:44:00 PM

You as well Lucilla.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/8/2014 12:12:00 AM

Ok I cant resist, I wrote a sequel, or at least another poem on same title!!!!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/8/2014 12:06:00 AM

Great minds really do think alike! Loved this one!

Mel Merrill

Date: 6/7/2014 3:09:00 AM

Hi Richard. What a cool write! Hope you win the contest, my friend. I enjoyed this...mel :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2014 7:38:00 AM

Thanks Mel. I rushed to get this one in, it was the last spot. I don't know if I followed the rules properly, either way I ended up with a new piece.