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Drenched In Silence

This was originally a poem by my little brother David Breidenthal. You can search it and find that my song version is a little bit similar to his poem. Enjoy! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I have no capability to cry for help I have no energy to save myself Can you hear the silence of my sad prayer? Daddy says You’re mad at me Are You even there? Drenched in silence…drenched in silence Can You hear me? Will You save me From him? Why do You stare at me From high above? Why do You laugh and jeer at me Where is the love? Oh, I know You hear me Feel my despair All the others are happy God, it isn’t fair… Drenched in silence…drenched in silence… Can You hear me? Will You save me? Ahhh….ahhh…..ahhh Something tells me Something tells me You hurt no one…no one Something tells me Something screams to me You hurt no one Not him, nor her, nor He… Just me… Drenched in silence…drenched in silence… I have no capability To cry for help I have no confidence To find you myself I will never believe What he said No one laid a hand on you You are not dead, just— Drenched in silence…drenched in silence Can you hear me? Will you save me? Can you here me? Do you fear me? Daddy says You’re mad at me Daddy pulls my hair Daddy says I’m bad to You Daddy says You’re there Can you hear me? Daddy says You’re mad at me Daddy says beware Daddy says I’m bad to you Daddy wants me bear Daddy says You’re mad at me Daddy pulls my hair Daddy says You’ll forgive me But I don’t think you care Drenched in silence…drenched in silence… Can You hear me? Will you save me? (from him) Can You hear me? Can You hear me? Can’t You hear me? Can’t You hear me? Can You hear me? Hear me, hear me Hear me, hear me Hear me, hear me Hear me…hear me

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 5/11/2012 7:46:00 PM
I love this song (made originally by a poem) and this is SO AWESOME! It is a great lyric. I can imagine Koreen singing this about her father and her true Father up there! Just beautiful and thanks for making this into a bittersweet song -DWB
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Date: 5/11/2012 7:49:00 PM
no sarcasm!!!!!!!!
Date: 4/8/2012 1:22:00 AM
I get a sense of someone lost in isolation. Painfully introspective and extremely well voiced. - Chuck
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Date: 2/6/2012 12:12:00 AM
Hello this more than touched a nerve with me... After loosing a loved one I felt exactly akin to these words. It's a tough world when the one you're taught to believe and love unconditionally seems to leave you suffering in the corner. Amazing emotions Karen
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Date: 1/30/2012 11:59:00 PM
He Listens to our cries, my dear, and Answers them as and when He Sees fit. I hope and pray that the pain expressed in this poem has got nothing to do with you.
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Date: 1/28/2012 11:19:00 AM
That's...that's a pretty gosh darn goody ya got there sista. - Kyle
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Date: 1/28/2012 9:31:00 AM
My dear Laura, God does hear you and He will! I hear you and you will be saved from him. Just keep your faith and don't you dare give up! "no one can take nothing from you if you don't give it up." Its a very beautiful song. I would love to sing that song on to my friends house and we make a Cd of it and I'd send it to you. Let me know what you think about it. You are so blessed and highly favored by God Allmighty! Never forget thata Laura o'kay? Profound song!
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Date: 1/28/2012 1:02:00 AM
AMAZINGSAUCE! =)
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Date: 1/28/2012 12:57:00 AM
the use of pleading images really gives a nice accent to the piece, laura... and the inner rhythm turns into a song of soulful rock.. greaat stuff! :) huggs!
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