Dreams of Africa

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The smooth, soft crackle of twigs from large feet Closer and closer wheezing, gasping increase Trumpeting, rumbling, crunching sound so neat In the jungle, mighty jungle can't rest in peace Whirr of wings at daybreak, as lions give a roar They wait by the water as thirst draws all Doves break the silence, as gazelles splash ashore All species come snorting, to nature's call Wind, swirling, train whistle resounding wind Sweeps across the Savannah's smooth plain Picks up those sleeping, transports round the bend Gently drops with a thud sleeping one in pain Dreams whether peaceful or wild are filtered Sweeping clean our brains so won't be off kilter finis' Date July 04, 2022 Contest: Onomatopoeia Sponsor: Emile Pinet

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Valsa George

Date: 7/8/2022 9:56:00 PM

You have composed a beautiful poem incorporating as many onomatopoeic words as possible ! I am sure you are heading for a victory. Please make the onomatopoeic sounds bold as directed. All the best, Sara....

Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/9/2022 12:38:00 PM

Valsa, Thank you for the suggestions about the bold. Your visit with a nice comment in encouraging. Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/4/2022 8:21:00 AM

Hope we will read the poem in its whole.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/5/2022 12:42:00 PM

Victor, Thanks for dropping by. Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/4/2022 6:56:00 AM

Sara, you've written poetry of a very high caliber here. You have, without a doubt, done a wonderful job and your work is a very beautiful and exquisite masterpiece.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 7/5/2022 12:30:00 PM

Why thank you, Sotto. I appreciate the kind review. Sara