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Dreaming (Triple Haiku)

DREAMING (triple Haiku) those intimate hours when a mere touch was thrilling and her wistful smile - but for another how I tried to fool myself that she really cared and now? just spilt wine it’s been?......... been how many years? i’ve lost count dreaming

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Judith Angell Meyer

Date: 6/19/2010 9:26:00 AM

Hello Daver ... I really like this triple Haiku. I'm a fan of the Haiku, but never tried a triple one. This really impressed me. I want to thank you too for your generous comment on my featured poem this last week. I appreciate that you took the time to read it.

Date: 6/8/2010 6:50:00 PM

This feels so honest and heartfelt. We all live with some of the "What if..." Interesting way to portray your thoughts. Keep on writing. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/7/2010 4:46:00 PM

Boy I still love this one Daver. igot 2 words for you Cold Shower,..Love the comment you left me on riddle and rhyme. It was a delight never have had Lace nor jane. maybe jane but never lace. Have a wonderful day,..Sidney LeeAnn=p.d.

Skat A

Date: 6/7/2010 8:52:00 AM

SWEET WRITE, ENJOYED -IRMA

Elaine George

Date: 6/6/2010 6:31:00 AM

Sometimes, reality is not what we wish it to be and so God gve us the will to dream. Sensational triple Haiku, Dave. Love, Lainie

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/5/2010 4:47:00 AM

~~~Magnificent~~~ Daver. Thank you for sharing you poetry with us. I enjoyed reading it this morning. Hope you have a wonderful weekend running over with inspiration. Love, Carol

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 6/5/2010 1:16:00 AM

Daver sometimes its time to stop dreaming and start living.then only will our dreams come true!Great poetry as ever!Celene.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/4/2010 11:41:00 PM

I really love this, Daver. So wistful. Nostalgia in every note. So glad you liked my tree poem. And the sugar triolet. well, I really need to get to bed. Otherwise, I'd be looking up some more of your oldies but goodies! YOu were my last comment for the night. LUv, Andrea

John Rhinem

Date: 6/4/2010 11:22:00 PM

Smile!? Its not that bad is it "My Beautiful Brother!?" ~ Smile, I love when poets write from their souls these deeply wonderful reflections ~ Smile, and "You," "You Are" a true poet, indeed!!! Smile, have I ever told You that I love You, Dear Daver? Smile, well, I most surely do!!! "Beautiful reflection Here, of A Beautiful Soul!!!" ~ "My Love to You Always," John! ~ Smile, "Bye Dear Brother!":) ~

Marie Harrison

Date: 6/4/2010 9:17:00 PM

Still there lovely dreams. Better to have spilt wine than none at all. What a beatiful poem Dover.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/4/2010 8:09:00 PM

This is such a heartfelt write, and how true as well...--nikko :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/4/2010 6:11:00 PM

Quite remnant memories. Who hasn't it?

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/4/2010 5:51:00 PM

Well done, sadly i feel like it is time for me to move on. However a dream is not a poinless way to lose count of hope, enjoyed,..p.d.

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/4/2010 5:40:00 PM

There is a sad story behind these words perhaps. Melancholy, and such a lovely poem! ~

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/4/2010 5:03:00 PM

We all have those reminiscent moments Daver and this is quite a special write .. a meaningful one looks like too... with luv from the "Sweetheart"

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/4/2010 2:50:00 PM

Interesting concept that you have penned in this one about wasting time on something unattainable...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara