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Dream Fishing

Yesteryear, my great grand mom fished here. Just a deep, breath filled, heart beat ago, these rocks served to mirror her prayers that they might float as hope inside air. These pebbles and her toes played feel games as sun rippled water touch-teased both. I sense her dreams under these old trees where she lay them down to carry on. Real life needs fish to best beat on and keep her eight boys growth towards strong. She sent her hearts dreams to float the stream. Her duties faced, led to my birth’s grace. ... CayCay Jennings December 1, 2016 Contest: River Line New - Rick Parise - 5th Place 12-line poem with 9 Syllables in each line used howmanysyllables.com

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Date: 2/27/2017 5:02:00 PM
wow, Caycay, I knew he would like yours. I don't know if I can handle a third loss with him. Wish I could think of a way to write how he likes these river poems. Congrats, dear.
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Date: 2/21/2017 10:19:00 AM
Very good write CayCay. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 2/19/2017 8:48:00 PM
Congrats, CayCay! Lovely sentiments!
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Date: 2/19/2017 8:41:00 PM
Coming back with congrats!
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Date: 12/12/2016 2:08:00 PM
Wonderful how the nostalgia sweeps in.my grandparents were dirt poor . Had no electricity , everything was candles and a coal stove where many a chicken was raised and even some lambs under. The toilet was the famous long drop and to go there you had to fight of the angry turkey with a broom.
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Date: 12/4/2016 4:17:00 PM
wow, he is going to love this, I just know it. I kind of think I know what he is looking for now. I do not write the style he likes, which is emotional and uniquely crafted words. I have a plain one which is the best I could do for him. It's not posted yet but you are not missing anything. Probably I will fail again. Oh my!
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Date: 12/3/2016 9:44:00 AM
Lovely image, CayCay. Your poem captures the dreamy feeling of fishing well. This must have been a welcome relief from caring for a large family, maybe the only she got. Nice tribute. Agnes
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Date: 12/3/2016 9:29:00 AM
CayCay, fishing is a prayerful interlude of solitude that clears the head and settles the heart. It allows one to hang out in silence amid the cacophony of children. Nicely written.
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Date: 12/3/2016 8:19:00 AM
Lovely ... You've captured a period of time in a beautiful way. Very nice to read. Hugs
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Date: 12/2/2016 11:25:00 PM
Beautiful Cay Cay. I can see you remembering your grandma as you walk familiar ground and visit familiar places. So well described. Loved this nostalgic feel to it. God Bless and a 7 from me. JB
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/2/2016 11:37:00 PM
Thank you so much, Judy. AND God bless you! All the best ... CayCay
Date: 12/2/2016 9:15:00 PM
I love the imagery in this one, CayCay! Very well done!
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 12/2/2016 11:06:00 PM
So good of you to say so, Rick! Thank you and best wishes ... CayCay

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