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Down For the Count

A boxer in the ring may think He’s getting all the breaks; Then bam! he’s down, for just like that, One punch is all it takes. I know exactly how he feels For suddenly, today, Whatever energy I had Quite quickly drained away. It happened as I headed home From taking in a movie. The walk was twenty-seven blocks, But I was feeling groovy. The last few streets seemed very long And man, I sure was sweating. I hoped that it was not the flu That somehow I was getting. I made it home and hit the couch And fell into a sleep; My dinner plans for later on I knew I couldn’t keep. Whatever hit me, from left field, Was surely tantamount To reeling from a punch that sent me Flat out for the count.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/12/2020 11:07:00 PM
Still love this ilene, somehow seems to relate to today more than anything,,Just checking out my favourite poems...Please Stay safe...
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Ilene Bauer
Date: 4/13/2020 4:33:00 AM
Wow, Harry! Thank you for reminding me of this poem, which sure does relate to today, though that was an ordinary flu. Stay safe yourself - let’s hope that none of us (or anyone else!) has to succumb to this current scourge...
Date: 2/9/2013 9:15:00 AM
Perfect rhythm! You even have some long words in there that can be hard to place. Describing your feelings on the page comes natural to you.
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Date: 1/12/2013 9:11:00 AM
Using a boxer's dilemma to describe your own feelings of total exhaustion is brilliant! Your flow and rhyming are excellent as always. Well done Ilene!! Best wishes, Keith
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Date: 1/12/2013 4:43:00 AM
take a real life situation, and girl don't you bring it on home to the reader... this is wonderful ilene, i felt i was there in the poem with you it was so visual,, this poem has just walked it way in to my fav... you are gem,,,, oh and by the way,, i hope you are feeling better....
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