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Pick-A-Title, Vol 39 Poetry Contest

Sponsered by Edward Ibeh

Disorientated means spinning spiral you feel your life out of control. Disorientated sounds like weeping late nights when you know you can't fix what was messed up. Disorientated feels like an elephant sitting on your chest when you are doing everything to escape and improve. Disorientated smells like burnt popcorn when you are trying to host a party. Disorientated taste like sour milk with a side of rotten eggs when you wanted a savory breakfast of an omelet and fried potatoes. Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree, and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches.

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 10/15/2023 11:00:00 AM

Heartiest congratulations on your win with this awesome poem, Miranda:-) I really liked it. Bravo!

Miranda Hawley
Date: 10/15/2023 12:46:00 PM

Glad you choose my poem for a winner in your contest, thanks!

Valsa George

Date: 10/13/2023 12:35:00 AM

So very powerful. All the analogies you have used to express a disoriented state are very apt. "Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree, and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches. " Very powerful image, dear Miranda!

Miranda Hawley
Date: 10/15/2023 12:47:00 PM

Glad you like my analogies. Thanks!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2023 9:48:00 PM

Oh wow. The last part was a zinger I see you liked the same word as I did. Good job with it.

Miranda Hawley
Date: 10/15/2023 12:47:00 PM

Glad you like the zinger I had at the end. Thanks!

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/30/2023 8:18:00 PM

Wonderful writing God bless you. Love, Gina

Miranda Hawley
Date: 9/30/2023 9:22:00 PM

Thank you very much.

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/30/2023 7:26:00 AM

Your understanding of what it means to be disoriented is quite varied and really pertinent. Really impressive work.

Miranda Hawley
Date: 9/30/2023 2:55:00 PM

Thank you and I am glad you found it pertinent. The varied part is because I decided to put it all to the senses literally all 5 senses.

The Situation

Date: 9/30/2023 6:23:00 AM

At this very moment watching Moby Dick. The man falls over board and is never seen again. Funny I should be reading this.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/29/2023 8:50:00 AM

You give many meanings to disorientated. All are very pertinent. Well done.

Miranda Hawley
Date: 9/29/2023 10:40:00 AM

Glad you found my definitions pertinent.

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/28/2023 7:07:00 AM

Miranda, I must commend you on this incredibly ingenious poem about the disoriented. It is truly remarkable and brilliantly crafted. Thanks for your uplifting comment on my page

Miranda Hawley
Date: 9/28/2023 11:47:00 AM

Thanks so much.