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Disillusion Oh Me

Sorrow weeps, small happiness creeps Remorse afloat, in my silk coat Emptiness appears, silence leers Fading shadow, far below Begging forgiveness, lots of emptiness............ Cemented dreams, gone to extremes Song of despair, not knowing I care Tears grabbing, hands jabbing Wisps of cries, light up the sky.............. Eyes pleading, heart bleeding Passion is no more, try to ignore Breath held, try to expel Life is gone, not so brawn............ Holding lifeless, so breathless Sobs of redemption, seize upon preemption Full fledged devastation, marks no exemption Temptress aching, no remaking....... The Disillusion Oh Me.... Brooke Dylan 2014

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Date: 5/15/2014 7:34:00 AM
Great style, great subject, great write. Sad feelings but you say it so well. kudoz
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Date: 5/14/2014 3:32:00 PM
Nicely written. I see you went for internal rhyme instead of end rhyme with these quatrains. It was very fun to read it though the topic is sad!
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Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/15/2014 5:22:00 PM
THANK YOU... Andrea... hugs
Date: 5/14/2014 9:10:00 AM
Interesting way of weaving all the imagery related to sadness.....well done!
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Brooke Dylan
Date: 5/15/2014 9:03:00 AM
THANK YOU Lily... nice to see you hugs

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