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Dirty Deeds

 The serpent closed in on Eve at twilight
 A nebulous shape in the half light, fangs
 Hidden beneath his hood and she, her vision
 Blurred was completely beguiled by his lies.

 He bought her white roses that she watered
 With her tears and chocolate dark like his soul.
 He spiced his lies with compliments and promises
 And she was completely beguiled by his lies.

 Like a sponge he sucked her resources and lied.
 When heavy with her giving heart he gave 
 His time to Evie then Everly and finally to
 Every woman or girl who glittered like gold.

 He matured and widened his audience to include
 Even his friends. He borrowed, stole, swindled
 Gambled, smiled and lied, lied and smiled
 Until his conscience died and he wreaked havoc
 On the lives of those who loved him most.  

 Now he's just a rat who slinks into his hole, scorned,
 shunned that’s his due, and finally  I want him to 
 know, I’ve put his portrait on Poetry Soup and all
 will remember him as  the-serpent-turned-rat
 who drowned  in his bowl of soup.

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  1. Date: 9/27/2012 7:45:00 PM
    Dear readers all, this is a poem about a character, not about a particular person. I am a fiction writer and creating characters is what I do best. This is a composite person who behaves a certain way, hence, the use of the word 'portrait.' Sherese

  1. Date: 9/3/2012 7:09:00 PM
    I love how you write! He is the evil serpent, it must die! She was genuine and weak! Love it!

  1. Date: 8/23/2012 5:22:00 AM
    great write Sherese,sense a little anger,the rat was found and pronounced,lol

  1. Date: 8/22/2012 9:43:00 PM
    O so you know him too?? LOL...just kidding girl, what a powerful and provoking write. Thanks for visiting and love. Joy Wells

  1. Date: 8/18/2012 11:02:00 AM
    I loved the ending. Strong emotions... is it for the contest?

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 7:14:00 PM
    From a serpent into a rat? You really must have hated him. Good way to poetically describe him.

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 6:03:00 PM
    Awesome poem!!!!!!! Enjoyed immensely. :D Always, Laura

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 11:18:00 AM
    nicely written of luck in the

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 11:07:00 AM
    I like this poem lots. Thanks for posting it. Thanks for reading and commenting on my recent work. Jancarl

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 4:26:00 AM
    Sherese I like it, if for the contest good luck..David

  1. Date: 8/16/2012 2:50:00 AM
    Scathing, though funny... Nice... Terry

  1. Date: 8/15/2012 11:04:00 PM
    Good luck in the it..:-) Thank you for sharing * Goodnight~ PD

  1. Date: 8/15/2012 8:49:00 PM
    sherese, this is a very interesting poem. You turned it into a very funny one by the end of it. A fun read.

    Gooden Avatar Sherese Gooden
    Date: 8/15/2012 9:00:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Thanks for reading, Andrea.
  1. Date: 8/15/2012 8:11:00 PM
    Ops, I forgot to say thank you for dropping by and reading my poem. Bless you always.

    Gooden Avatar Sherese Gooden
    Date: 8/15/2012 9:01:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry

    Leonora, thanks for same.
  1. Date: 8/15/2012 8:10:00 PM
    This is awesome, Sherese! You've developed the topic so well. Good luck and best wishes to you always. hugs, leonora