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Detergent Dreams

Surface tension Third dimension Imperfect sphere Rays interfere Spectral contours Numbers ensure Hydroxide base Light interface Occam's cutlass Logic's numbness Can not destroy Our childish joy Ever humble Soap sud bubble Magical wide eyed wonder Capturing a father's heart Blowing bubbles Soapy sorcery Daughter's delight Laughing Must hold Must keep Must treasure He stayed her tiny hands These are our dreams You cannot destroy them Look how hope carries them high The large ones wobble Then pop under their own weight The small ones float longer Simple and sensible None last forever Don't cry There are always more bubbles Look how they touch Some pull apart They burst Some pull together They grow See the rainbow colours? There's a pot of gold at the end And all the bubbles float upwards To make a castle in the sky Out of our dreams But daddy Soap bubbles are spheres And have no ends And no pots of gold And castles belong on the ground And they're made of stone And not of dreams Silly daddy He looked at his daughter And wondered where the years went Her childhood an ephemeral existence Of a bubble The soap had run out And she had grown up As we all must Entry to "utopia and the soap bubble" contest Written 6th March 2017 Notes: Soap typically contains either sodium hydroxide (caustic soda) or potassium hydroxide "Occam's cutlass" is a reference to Occam's razor - the principle that the simplest explanation is often the correct one

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Date: 6/14/2017 5:23:00 PM
congrats on your win :)
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Mark Martin
Date: 6/15/2017 2:21:00 PM
Thanks Debbie! :-)
Date: 4/8/2017 2:48:00 AM
Congratulations Mark, this is marvellous and a 'different' take on the theme. I like your poem. Many wishes, Kai
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Date: 4/10/2017 9:29:00 AM
Thanks Kai! All the best! Mark :-)
Date: 4/3/2017 2:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!!
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Mark Martin
Date: 4/4/2017 2:05:00 PM
Thanks Meenakshi! :-)
Date: 4/3/2017 8:50:00 AM
This one really touched me--Beautiful! Congrats on your win! Janice
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Mark Martin
Date: 4/4/2017 2:04:00 PM
Thanks Janice - glad you enjoyed! :-)
Date: 3/13/2017 9:21:00 AM
This reads like a winner, Mark:) awesome, a 7:) I don't even know what to write..
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Date: 3/13/2017 1:44:00 PM
Thanks Jo! :-)
Date: 3/9/2017 4:54:00 PM
Capturing so many emotions within a bubble..Great write Mark..A7
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Date: 3/10/2017 3:13:00 PM
Thanks Joseph! :-)
Date: 3/9/2017 4:04:00 PM
A touching write, Mark--reminds me of "Cat's in the Cradle" by Harry Chapin. Janice
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Mark Martin
Date: 3/10/2017 3:12:00 PM
Thanks Janice - just listened to the song on YouTube - haven't heard it for years. All the best! Mark :-)
Date: 3/9/2017 6:27:00 AM
A wonderful write Mark, life in a soap bubble. A great concept.
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Date: 3/9/2017 10:54:00 AM
Thanks James! :-)
Date: 3/7/2017 11:35:00 AM
Brilliant!! Mark this says so much... I especially liked your ref to Occam's Razor ("Occam's cutlas"). Clever ;) well done and best wishes for the contest. Big Hugggs deb
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Date: 3/7/2017 1:46:00 PM
Thanks Deb! Quite enjoyed writing this one. All the best! Mark :-)
Date: 3/6/2017 5:48:00 PM
I see bubbles floating out of your words--Precious Mark !! ~~ Jeanie ~~
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Mark Martin
Date: 3/7/2017 1:41:00 PM
Thanks Jeanie! :-)
Date: 3/6/2017 3:40:00 PM
gosh, I had no CLUE how to do this challenge, but you took off with it and ran to make a touchdown. The last half for me just got better and better until that awesome last line. I just know this one should SCORE. (me - I won't even try)
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Mark Martin
Date: 3/7/2017 1:39:00 PM
Thanks Andrea! Bit of a strange mix "utopia" and "soap bubbles", but still enjoyed the challenge. All the best! Mark :-)

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