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Deserted Dreams

Crawling on my hands and knees The sand is hot, burning my already blistered skin An angry sun breaks the layers of a cloudless sky, as my shadow weeps Miles claim my strength, scattering debris of littered lies, piled high between me and her And I fall out of breath, out of time Vultures circle, orbiting patterns of shame foraging on the carcass, bleached white in deserted dreams, alone and dying… alone and dying… dying… without her

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 11/18/2016 11:30:00 AM
Heavy poem, Chris. Real heavy. You got us the reader dying w/you, bro. Find that oasis, man. Very haunting write. Well penned. Love always.
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Chris Green
Date: 11/18/2016 5:03:00 PM
Thanks again Freddie. I'm looking for it, I swear I am. :)
Date: 11/18/2016 7:48:00 AM
Wow this one packs a potent punch! The imagery made the hair on my arms come to attention. Vultures, nasty critters. You got it bad Chris. :)
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Chris Green
Date: 11/18/2016 8:24:00 AM
Thanks so very much Paloma for always being so kind to me
Date: 11/17/2016 2:29:00 PM
It's very poetic x How a poem should be x well done great x
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Chris Green
Date: 11/17/2016 2:31:00 PM
Thank you so much Wendy for your visit and your kind words. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on my poem.
Date: 11/17/2016 10:58:00 AM
such a heartbreaker so deeply expressed, chris.. hope this fiction but maybe not... salute and huggs
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Chris Green
Date: 11/17/2016 2:29:00 PM
Thanks Nette, I hope it is too. :) I appreciate your visit and kind words my friend.
Date: 11/17/2016 10:22:00 AM
Chris this one is very intense. Well done putting such emotions into words. Very sad. Lies can hurt so much and being lonely can run so deep. May you find what you are looking for :)
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Chris Green
Date: 11/17/2016 2:28:00 PM
Thank you Heidi, so very much. Your kindness is felt and welcomed so much today. I appreciate you my friend.
Date: 11/17/2016 10:13:00 AM
Hope you'll find an oasis in that desert...We are all there at times...Between reality and lies we make believe..to let ourselves feel better..May She comes to you..like frosted manna in the middle of nowhere..Your words are always so moving and inspiring...Your verses even inspire how a comment should be : )
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Chris Green
Date: 11/17/2016 2:28:00 PM
Thank you so much my sweet friend. Your kindness always touches me and makes me smile. I appreciate everything you do for me.

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