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I'm sitting cross legged on the side of the road while Dad holds my shoulders, in trying to console me, but tears, uncontrolled, keep tumbling down. Most stunning, right now, is the fear, I've not known Never before, .....had I felt so alone. Reality has settled, like darkness around me A first-time encounter with death and it's toll Though, how many times, I have played out the role? It was always the same..... Just a game to be played The drama? Just kid's-stuff.....who knew what it meant? Bang, Bang you're dead!... Point a finger .... he's dead A stab, rubber swords, ... at my eight year old heart ? While slowly, with drama, we played out the parts Our death scenes, .....pretending to take a last breath Then, back on our knees, and up in a flash ready again, to reverse all the rules...... Death wasn't real........and never this cruel Tonight, driving home a deer out of nowhere, A thump, and a jar, a flash in the light And in the dash of a moment, ....a crumpling crash Make-believe shatters, in the path of our car Dad reaching his hand, to check I'm alright Then opens the door out into the night Reluctantly I follow his somber silhouette And met by a moment I'll never forget The air bitter cold, has taken our breaths I turn eyes away, but now it's too late Glass lifeless eyes stare back in the lights I'm strangled by silence, and the shattering sight as still and cold, as real as if stones, The deer's lifeless eyes, stare into the night I feel such a change in the stars and the sky I felt something die, in a child's heart tonight _____________________________________________ 9/1/15 Carrie Richards For Trashed #2 Contest: Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 10/14/2015 10:02:00 PM
Carrie, Congrats on your trashed #2 win. SKAT <3
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Date: 10/12/2015 10:17:00 AM
Hey Carrie, a BIG congratulations on your excellent poem being chosen for 1st place win in the contest! Absolutely stunning and heart wrenching story telling. Can't understand why this would not have placed in the other contest. Beautifully written and expressed! Be Blessed, Neva
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Date: 10/12/2015 3:06:00 AM
Congrats on superb winning write Carrie! Wonder why such a good write got trashed?
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Date: 10/11/2015 9:21:00 PM
Congrats, a very fine poem and hard to imagine it ever being trashed.
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Date: 10/11/2015 6:43:00 PM
You are such a great writer, Carrie - the poem is brilliant and emotional, one that sits with the reader for awhile. Congratulations ... CayCay
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Date: 10/11/2015 3:12:00 PM
wow, what a powerful one, Carrie. Trashed, huh?? What did you do? go over a word count or something?hahaha. If you broke no rules, the judge of that one was really off!!
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Date: 10/11/2015 2:54:00 PM
Amazing and so gripping, Carrie...from imagination to reality...quite a leap for a child to adjust to something like this. So happy it now got the credit it deserves with your top place win! Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/11/2015 1:32:00 PM
Wow Carrie this brought a lump to my throat - I don't know which contest it didn't place in but sure deserves a top spot which you now have - congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 10/11/2015 12:26:00 PM
Conrad's on your win, sad topic! Light & Love
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