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Dark or Decayed Words Contest by Constance La France

September 8, 2023

"I thought I'd feel comforted by walking through my childhood home. The only emotion I felt was melancholy that it had been abandoned and left alone to die." ~ by poet
I sat in sorrow as tears salted the coffee in my cup while I recalled the crumbling house of my youth. I drove by yesterday and found it in need of repair. The front porch planks had been badly cut up, old wavy windows were all shattered. Forsooth, the decayed look of it left me filled with despair. Balustrades broken; paper peeled from the walls. Ceilings sagged from many years of leaks in the roof. The antique canopy bed where I once laid my head was in ruins, along with Persian carpets in the halls. I shook my head and clicked my tongue in reproof upon seeing the fireplace mantle painted brick red. The lovely flower garden had not faired any better... Our well-tended heirloom roses had been left to die. Mama's clippers and trowels were corroded with rust. Gone was the swing where I wrote my first love letter. I could not bear to look and turned away with a sigh. Cobwebs adorned corners, covered in layers of dust. I couldn't say fond farewell when it was time to leave, nor did I turn for one last look, what could I have said? I felt the need to hold my memories and a glass of wine. I remember it the way it was then, and I began to grieve for a house that had once been my own; the homestead, and started humming the wistful tune, 'Auld lang syne.'

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Date: 9/10/2023 10:50:00 PM
Lin, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, I like the image and quote also, Constance
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Date: 9/11/2023 6:06:00 AM
Thanks for the honor, Constance. It's always my pleasure to write for your contests.
Date: 9/10/2023 8:48:00 PM
A very grand poem. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/11/2023 6:06:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Chris.
Date: 9/10/2023 8:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your contest top win with this lovely poem, Lin.
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Date: 9/11/2023 6:05:00 AM
Thanks very much, Lasaad.
Date: 9/9/2023 12:52:00 AM
Was very hard to read this, will have to come back and read more slowly, of course the poem is beautiful but it brought back to me some memories hard to deal with, but that's what good poetry does. :)
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Date: 9/11/2023 6:05:00 AM
Arthur, I'm sad to learn my poem touched you with bad memories. Thank you for considering it good poetry. It's so very nice to see you.
Date: 9/8/2023 11:47:00 AM
Your memories Lin bring back to life when that old house was your home, beautifully written with little reminders in every nook and cranny of each stanza, an almost flashback like experience, great one for contest, cheers David
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Date: 9/8/2023 11:58:00 AM
Thank you, David, and if it had been my house I'd have felt the same way about each detail. It's only make believe.
Date: 9/8/2023 10:47:00 AM
It is always emotional to visit an abandoned decaying childhood home. Vividly described.
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Date: 9/8/2023 10:49:00 AM
Thanks so much for always being so supportive, Jay.
Date: 9/8/2023 9:50:00 AM
Such vivid description i feel emotional reading it, I wrote a haibun on a similar sort of theme. well penned my friend, you excel at every form you write - this is real poetry at its best:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/8/2023 10:04:00 AM
Well, thank you so much for the kudos, Jan. I'll have to send you a new cheerleader outfit and matching pom poms. Seriously, sweet friend, you honor me.

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