Death Watch

The day I died, My wife cried out Beside my corpse.

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Gert W. Knop

Date: 5/17/2011 8:34:00 AM

Hi Jack! Thank you so much for your comment, at least we've got the 7th ranking! I am still handicapped with my right arm and hand and now a new problem with my left shoulder! Old age I guess!!! But I'm far from complaining. I also loved it to work with you! It was a great time!...Hope you and Sue are ok!...Have a great week! Love, Gert

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/15/2011 7:24:00 AM

I tried this for a while back but I love how your did yours Jack :) hope your weekend is a good one ;)

James Foulk

Date: 5/14/2011 8:45:00 PM

love this form of poetry really different.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/14/2011 7:32:00 PM

Than-Bauk sounds like a Thailander's dish....lol. I like this form...I am new to it and appreciate the exposure...glad u are not "living" thru your poetry, as this poem would be a bad omen for u. Have a blessed weekend, Jack.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 5/14/2011 5:40:00 PM

Don't laugh (ok sorry but I had to laugh, ONLY because of my captcha) I swear these captcha things creep me out sometimes-- it actually says "BUHU" here o_0. Whoa! How uncanny was that huh? but seriously, the form you used caught my eye- somebody told me about this form & I tried it out, very interesting topic you have here, and it got me wanting to try this form again...enjoy your weekend, Jack-- I hope what you say here though won't happen for a long long time...

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/14/2011 10:52:00 AM

Experienced this, Jack. So have many others. A very sad image in your poem. I'm not familiar with this form, but I love the way you used it. Thanks for your comments on Tombstone. I visited there and could sense the presence of spirits at the Bird Cage. Have a wonderful weekend! Love, Carolyn

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 5/14/2011 9:14:00 AM

scary thoughts shared here Jack...