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Death Said Hi

Death tried to say hi today but don't worry I walked away. Sometimes I think about replying but I decide I have to much to live for. Death tried to say hi today. But once again I walked away. It was harder this time though. I don't feel nearly as happy. My friends don't notice I try to hide my sadness and pain with a fake smile. Death tried to say hi today. This time I barely walked away. He bothers me while I sleep. He tells me " you have nothing to live for". But still I don't reply. Death tried to say hi today. This time I tried to reply. I saw the blade and knew it wouldn't take much. I woke up in the hospital. But I still didn't get the chance to reply to death. I said hi to death today. My friends and family gather and black they realize now that the smiles were fake. I left a note and all it said was " Death said hi today and I simply replied

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John Lawless

Date: 10/2/2016 3:00:00 PM

Victoria, this is a very terse and terrifying write. The metaphor and personification are magnificent. The visual image of Death trying to say hi, almost a pick-up line scene, is captivating. Death and I have nodded a few times but never engaged in any exchanges.

Karen Edwards-Gregory

Date: 9/29/2016 11:13:00 AM

Wow! This poem was phenomenal, even though it was so sad...but it's also very realistic, so many people struggle with replying to such a call, and some end up losing the battle of replying or not. Powerful!

James Inman

Date: 9/29/2016 9:32:00 AM

A powerful poem of depression. Your last line is very effective, leaving a note is usually a cry for help that is often too late in situations like this.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/7/2016 1:54:00 PM

VICTORIA, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Skat A

Date: 8/31/2016 1:09:00 AM

Victoria A Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :) Drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs **YNR - SKAT