Death

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April 23, 2024 22.18pm

Note: Just a try of Andaree Form, a beautiful poetry type created by an amazing poetess, Andrea Dietrich. It was not entered in the latest Andaree poem contest because it came late.

Death (andaree form) This thief comes anytime of the day and night With claws of raptor sharper than scythe Grabbing us, loved ones or friends Mortality ends Soul departs Hence Lift our hearts To God, He stays, tends Transgressions, offenses mends So that at hour of death we find the light This thief comes anytime of the day and night.

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 5/3/2024 8:56:00 AM

Hello sweet friend. I am so happy you are recently back online. Congratulations on this andaree form - a perfect theme nicely written. I find the andaree fun to write. :)

Christina Bowring

Date: 4/30/2024 3:28:00 PM

Dear Len, this is such a poignant poem and so well written. It’s very profound too, ‘ This thief comes anytime of the day or night’ . A reflective read. I love the faith, hope, in the line, ‘ So that at hour of death we find the light’. It’s so uplifting. Really enjoyed it my dear, sweet friend. Hugs and blessings to you xx

Silent One

Date: 4/23/2024 11:28:00 AM

A clever but sad take on the reality of death and you did it so well with this for... I like the use of words and comparisons.. philosophical and deep in a sense.. Best of luck in the contest..

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/23/2024 8:58:00 AM

Your "Death" is a wonderful write. Yes, it is a thief day or night. Wish you had it in the contest. Hugs... Have a blessed day writing away.........................