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Dealkiller: Lying

She looked a little young But she said she was 21 So I bought her a drink And with a smile and a wink She came on to me Flirting shamelessly… So we went back to my place And full body embraced Then afterwards she said She was 15, and I saw red In a rush the anger mounted Before I knew it I was choking her out… I wasn’t going to jail For getting some tail Or labeled a rapist because She lied what age she was Or worse, a child molester Because I caressed her… Soon her eyes stared listlessly Still pretty - a necrophiliac’s dream But alive she could have ruined my life Over a drunken 5 minute ride She never should have lied to me - I grab her body and start chopping… 12/8/11

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2013 1:14:00 AM

Susan, this is one of my favorites of yours. I like dark stuff. Like Dexter and Walking Dead, so of course, this one would appeal to me. You ought to write a book like this. How is the one book of yours coming along. I know it promises to be filled with chills, right? Congratulations for your win today!!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/29/2013 8:33:00 PM

Hola Susan, my dearest friend, Congratulations with your "Any Poem Goes" in my contest. It was an honor in hosting this contest once again. Take care and enjoy the up coming Easter Holiday. Goodnight*Always*LINDA

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/9/2012 6:42:00 PM

Susan, this is NOT dirtying up the poetry site as the guy below seems to think. As a huge fan of horror movies, I can say, this was low key enough to not be too raw for anyone adult enough to understand the story! I LOVE it, Andrea

John Loving Iii

Date: 1/4/2012 8:08:00 AM

What kind of statement is this? Something you should have put on another site without dirtying up this one. You just lost my respect. I sudjust you delete this trash from our site. And refrain from bringiing it here again.john

Edwin Baldwin

Date: 12/22/2011 3:29:00 AM

A very telling tale from beginning to bitter end... good luck in the contest.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 12/12/2011 1:41:00 PM

eerie yet beautifully laid out, susan.. what a unique take!.. missed your contest but i'm back after those " copying" blues and my allergy.. miis ya; hugggs and winning wishes! :)

Jack Horne

Date: 12/12/2011 8:22:00 AM

Scary piece, Susan - and no doubt has happened somewhere in the world at some time. Thanks - loved your contest. No, Jack would wear a mac, (raincoat) LOL

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/10/2011 5:41:00 PM

Just rereading this one. What a stunner for shock effect. I sure hope it wins big.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/9/2011 6:25:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry today Susan. Wishing you a beautiful weekend full of joy. Love, Carol

John Smith

Date: 12/8/2011 11:58:00 PM

Whoa! That's brutal. No doubt it's happened, though.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2011 11:53:00 PM

oh my GOSH, bloody dark this one is, and you know what?? I LOVE it!! He'd rather risk life imprisonment and possible death penalty for murder than a few years for rape. Good grief!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/8/2011 11:53:00 PM

BY the way, let me know right away how you scored the poems. I'm dying to know!! when will you post winners?