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Dead As a Dodo

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Put my key in the ignition – the car battery was flat Dead as a blooming Dodo … now what do you think of that Had promised mum I’d take her to the church fete I had to get a wriggle on, I can stand being late I walked as quickly as I could – it’s really not too far Arrived just a few minute late – mum thinks that I’m a star We drank a lovely cup of tea and ate a biscuit or two Rang hubby about my car – oh boy I felt so blue Went to the local garage and Dave the owner came straight round Got the car started straight away – he’s a gem to have around Kept the engine running, now the battery is topped right up Need to drive more regularly – not leave it until it’s kaput! 30th July 2015

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James Fraser

Date: 10/10/2015 1:08:00 PM

We do sometimes think that such mechanics last forever, if only they did. Another lovely humerous write Jan, hugs xxxx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/10/2015 2:08:00 PM

Thanks James I still try and write with humour no mater what is going on in my life - guess it's my way of coping:-) hugs Jan xx

Kelvin Jack

Date: 8/14/2015 5:04:00 AM

Many tools have break downs similer to your car, do we give up or keep trying

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2015 5:10:00 AM

We got back from a 4 day break yesterday - i got in my car to go to work ..... dead as a dodo again ... this time its a new battery can't abide something that doesn't work and i can't rely on:-( hugs jan xx

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/4/2015 7:39:00 PM

Yup even mechanical things need attention! Light & Love

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2015 2:35:00 AM

LOl They sure do - I was ill for 10 day and didn't drive and then when I did I was using the car very rarely and for short trips - I intend to be a little more proactive now lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Pettit

Date: 8/3/2015 7:19:00 PM

Reminds me of a personal experience on a trip to Florida several years ago. My lady friend left a map light on inside overnight, and when I got into my car the next morning, the battery was dead. Nicely written couplets.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2015 2:53:00 AM

Thanks Robert - it is a lovely surprise to see a comment from you ... it is wonderful to see you back:-) hugs Jan xx

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 8/2/2015 4:06:00 AM

This made me smile, Kaput is a word that seems to have gone out of fashion. Have not heard it for many years, shame really it says it all. We tend to say something is banjaxed. However, you have written a very enjoyable good fun poem. Best wishes ~Delice

Jan Allison
Date: 8/3/2015 6:57:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Delice - I chose the word deliberately as Dave's partner is German - oh how that final couplet made her laugh:-) hugs jan xx

Jack Ellison

Date: 7/31/2015 6:16:00 AM

Love this last line, "not leave it until it’s Kaput" Great word to built a whole limerick around! LOL Love, Jack xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 6:26:00 PM

Dave's partner is from Germany -when I took the poem round today she burst out laughing at 'kaput' - - it has now been pinned up in the garage reception:-)hugs jan xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 6:21:00 AM

If anyone can do a limerick with kaput I know you can lol:-) hugs jan xx

Vera Duggan

Date: 7/31/2015 5:04:00 AM

Oh Jan that is so good and funny, it really reminded me of a couple of cars we have had in the past, I know you can't swear but I did with my cars, this is so well written Jan, hope you are well, take care.............Vera..

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 5:10:00 AM

Thanks Vera - I take inspiration from what is around me - I have printed the poem out for Dave to hang in his garage - will drop it by later:-) hugs jan xx

Rachel Preston

Date: 7/30/2015 10:13:00 PM

just fab!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 1:59:00 AM

I try and make the best of every situation Rachel - and I got a decent poem out of it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 7/30/2015 6:26:00 PM

A lovely penned JAN, you penned this brilliant..I like the pic you posted with it, so sunny.....good luck in the contest........A.M.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/31/2015 1:58:00 AM

Just a fun write - well I say a fun write ... it wasn't funny at the time when my car wouldn't start! Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/30/2015 4:05:00 PM

Jan, you are just gong to town with all kinds of poems latelyl Forgot to say congrats to you in that email. You lucky duck. I get NOTHING from MY freaking community. You are my last comment for the afternoon and now gotta get home to hubbie. bye bye!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 4:10:00 PM

I have to go with the flow of my muse Andrea - all kinds of weird stuff coming out my brain at the moment lol... will keep you posted re Monday :-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/30/2015 2:51:00 PM

That is why I always have jumper cables with me...It is nice to have an honest mechanic you can turn to.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 2:54:00 PM

He's looked after our cars for about 15 years and has become a lovely friend - he was due to go to lunch but dropped me home got the car started - I am truly blessed to have people like him in my life:-) hugs jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 7/30/2015 2:36:00 PM

especially with winter on its way Jan great pen hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 2:40:00 PM

Thanks Shadow - it was not the best start to the day! Thank goodness it is the school holidays and I wasn't stressing to get to work! :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/30/2015 1:57:00 PM

- Although we (women) can make the most ..... we can not conjure :))) - But, mum was happy :) - A great poem, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:59:00 PM

There is no way i could have even opened the bonnet - Dave had to remove fastenings to do it - he is not only a great mechanic and a lovely friend too:-) hugs Jan xx

Ian Jones

Date: 7/30/2015 1:48:00 PM

Great write and great story. I think cars know when its the week before payday or an important occasion and then do the Dying Swan on us. Kind regards, Ian

Jan Allison
Date: 7/30/2015 1:55:00 PM

It has never let me down before - i managed to get to take mum out so all ended well - i have printed a copy of the poem out for Dave at the garage and will take him a bottle of wine tomorrow:-) Hugs jan xx