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Dead Winter

"DEAD WINTER" Fresh snowfall on my porch A story of not so long ago. 7 inches above my ankles The neighbor's chimney smokes like a cigarette. The doorbell rings, I shudder and tremble I breathe at the moment before I twist the knob He was there alone. A man with eyes likes the moon A hunter in a black coat He storms in, shoving me out of his way He twists around and reveals his name His name bleeds through my soul My mind begins to white-out every memory I firmly get a grasp on reality A wanted man Carrying myself up against the bookshelf. My eyes start to shed a course of rain His eyes are bright green with golden specks, pierce in the logical way of the hawk I cradle on the sofa, like a child Alone This stranger who stood before me Wants more than the warmth of my home It's snowing deep down my flower bed. It's too cold outside. The fireplace can act no more It's too cold inside! He proceeds slowly, towards the kitchen door I see him reaching for the stainless steel Soon the beat will end, I inhale his eyes that are the size of the moon This visitor, at my door, He whispers into my ear. "I'm preparing the ways of good and evil. Now go, be free into the promised land." by: PD

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 9/19/2015 8:45:00 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
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Date: 9/14/2015 1:29:00 PM
Poet Sis,, congrats on placing in Nette's awesome contest. SKAT
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Date: 9/14/2015 3:57:00 AM
Congrats on ur superb winning write Linda, its so very beautiful!
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Date: 9/14/2015 3:56:00 AM
hi PD... this must be for my challenge though i was wondering about the contest title.. i had to place it; so beautiful and right down the theme's alley..thank you for joining and huge congrats!
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Date: 10/20/2012 9:29:00 PM
Hi, sis! I stopped by here, same title as the re-write poem for the contest hmmmnnn... but this is so great! I enjoy the reading and i can feel so much emotion here! Well, thank you for your precious time rereading my poems and your inspiring messages my dearest sis and friend! love/hugs:) Leonora
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Date: 6/18/2012 3:35:00 AM
so thrilling from starting to climax .buy i am confused with the last line '' now go and be free in the promise land '' .thank you for sharing .jk
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Date: 1/15/2012 11:08:00 PM
did you cross the fiery chasm, or were you quick released, did he drift away in spasm, commit murder of the beast?
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Date: 1/15/2012 10:46:00 PM
How tragic! If you had an ADC home security system, this might not have happened. Good write Linda.
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Date: 1/22/2012 3:25:00 PM
I meant an ADT home security system. Sorry about that.
Date: 12/25/2011 5:34:00 AM
Scary and you closed this with great lines. how the murderer acted like he's the extension of God's hands.. just like terrorists do! Enjoyed this! :)
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Date: 12/11/2011 3:17:00 PM
I like poetry, I like rhyme, and now I even like story time. Although my dreams now filled with fright. I probably won't sleep a wink tonight. :)
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Date: 12/9/2011 5:13:00 AM
Scary x
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Date: 12/7/2011 8:17:00 AM
P.D., magnificent storytelling! A lovely poem full of vibrant imagery, though it is exceptionally chilling and a bit frightening as has been noted. Still, it screams excellence in poetry and writing. You should be writing fiction and selling books with this sort of material. Thanks for your comments on "The Path", sometimes finding the ability to forgive is the hardest journey.
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Date: 12/7/2011 3:13:00 AM
Thrilling and Romantic, PD. Keep up the excellent free verses, I really enjoy them.
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Date: 12/4/2011 5:30:00 PM
sounds naughty.....thanks for reading my poems. Is it really snowing there?
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Date: 12/4/2011 11:17:00 AM
Dont open the door . . . . Like it, but I will close my door tonight. OXOX Anne-Lise
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Date: 12/4/2011 12:23:00 AM
Another great piece here PD, dramatic yet you wrapped with such sublimity that I simply enjoyed to be drawn in your story
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Date: 12/3/2011 6:00:00 PM
this was a bad dream that could have ended so so differently.
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Date: 12/3/2011 1:23:00 PM
Interesting drama here. Kind of scary, too. I am going to be in Texas nest April - visiting relatives. Peace and Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 12/3/2011 12:08:00 PM
Frightening. I assume this piece is not autobiographical. Your style is great, passionate and coldly intense. Here's one for you. ON my block the other day we had a walk-by shooting - not a drive-by shooting, a WALK-BY shooting. Three youths walked up the block and pumped 5 shots into the house on the corner. The former owner of the house is in prison. I think the shooting may have been a vendetta. No one hurt, fortunately. Love, daver
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Date: 12/3/2011 12:02:00 PM
It's full of suspense and frightening where eyes are the size of the moon. You have written smoothly. Thanks for this write and thanks for stopping by, my friend. bl
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Date: 12/3/2011 10:33:00 AM
Great wild story..If for a contest, it should have the sponsor spellbound for a few minutes..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..I just had to write about the buzzards..I have one that is quite long that I may post..Someone sent me an email with the albino hummer picture then I wrote that Haiku very swiftly and looked to see if any pictures were on the internet and yes there were..The Albino Hummer must not be so rare..Sara
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Date: 12/3/2011 9:27:00 AM
your story is so real,,,and so wonderful,,i love reading line for line,,,sitting on the edge of my seat,,it could be a book,,,,or a short story,,and i want to read more about it,,,and i am so humbled by your comments,,,and friendship,,i will try ever so much to keep your friendship close to my heart,,,as i know in this life,,we dont have many close friends....
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Date: 12/3/2011 8:52:00 AM
I dont remember dropping by your place, PD....lol. A really creepy tale, madame; and very well explained too. Is it for any contest? PS thanks for visiting me too, i'll be posting soon. Have been really busy with work lately
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Date: 12/3/2011 7:29:00 AM
Creepy. Intense. A great way to feel while I eat my Eggos for breakfast. :) This was damn intense.
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Date: 12/3/2011 4:58:00 AM
See my sweet, poetry like this comes from eyes wide open and seeing beyond the pages. Btw we can be the next Sonny n Cher lol. Re. My blog. Always with a hug Michael
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