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Silence spoken for by the rain— A missing space for the missing gold of sun, As the wind breaks on song, his china fall— There my eyes soak up the tears now that he's gone. A missing space for the missing gold of sun, Wordless whispers, never I hear, dead— As the wind breaks on song, his china fall, His image on my face, a welcome diversion— Wordless whispers, never I hear, dead— As the wind breaks on song, his china fall; His image on my face, a welcome diversion— Silence spoken for by the rain.

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Date: 3/25/2024 8:33:00 PM
Dear Paige I am so sorry for your loss It leaves an enormous gap that nothing can fill time does help but also brings sorrow we find that everyone else has moved on but for us it's still as fresh as if yesterday I know as i also lost my dad last year hugs Shadow
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Date: 3/20/2024 4:46:00 PM
Creative lines penned. These are not so easy to write, but you have made it seamless. Thanks for sharing. Sara K
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Date: 3/19/2024 8:19:00 PM
Hugs- I know you're hurting, it takes time.... you share the best of him! Letting all your emotions breathe, there's sympathetic faith around you, holding you while you grieve..... with support A.S.
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Date: 3/14/2024 11:01:00 PM
A well written poem in a difficult style. I felt the song of the wind throughout the poem.
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Date: 3/14/2024 4:22:00 AM
Creative work you have penned. I am wondering if you have had a death in your family, if so I am sorry to learn of it and I hope you will heal soon and only have good memories. Sara K
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Date: 3/13/2024 7:29:00 PM
Thiss is so gorgeous, Paige, Impressive imagery, I hahave yet to learb. You go girl! Pangie x
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Date: 3/12/2024 5:07:00 PM
a lovely Pantoun...the silence and longing in the heart of the narrator spoke to me. You've captured the pain of loss softly and eloquently. Love your poetic style, hugs, Sara
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Date: 3/12/2024 12:48:00 PM
Love this one Paige.. nice use of form and word usage is great..
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Date: 3/12/2024 11:51:00 AM
Such a depth in your poetry Paige!! Beautifully penned! -Smita
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Date: 3/12/2024 9:57:00 AM
a moving piece surrounded in grief. A creative Pantoum that speaks in the silence of the heart. Paulette
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Date: 3/12/2024 9:03:00 AM
Dear Paige, your poem is hauntingly beautiful. The imagery of silence spoken by the rain and the missing space for the absent sun evokes a sense of longing and loss. The repetition and structure add depth to the emotions conveyed. Your words linger, capturing the essence of grief and the solace found in memories. This is a wonderful poem. Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 3/12/2024 4:17:00 AM
Creative way to go with this one. Very expressive. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 3/12/2024 3:41:00 AM
“ A missing space for the missing gold of sun, Wordless whispers, never I hear, dead—” how deep and moving are those lines dear paige. Your words woven here truly is so touching and flows in such eloquence. I love the way you’ve expressed in this form that you always do so well, iv missed reading you. Hope you are doing well. Sending you light
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