Dawning Sun Shape

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Written: May 03, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I witnessed the dawn seraphic sapphire spike, I marveled at the world's exquisiteness strike. The colors shimmered in the first light glow, Cleansed by nature's tears of the night flow. The cracks and scratches of each passing day, Rest below the morning mist, silky display. Tattered torn edge of an aging landscape, Blessed and healed by the kiss of dawn escape. These scenes have opened my eyes before, However, their insight remains in explore. A truth, now revealed, from within my heart, After haze, the sun's limber rays impart. After sorting amid the dust life's sand, An array of the exceptional grew at hand. A solitary grain amid circular void space, Never did I predict leaping ways in a trace. I cast my heart aside into the ocean, An indigo scope of a replica of devotion. Brimming with tremendous vision, A shimmering journey toward emotion. I let out a sigh and gave in to its might, The glowing streams of sacred insight. Permeate me with an empathic fervor, Gaze is off rays of a sempiternal usurper.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/5/2024 7:01:00 PM

SP, seems as though certain insights come when you are ready to take them in. Looking at the rising sun in a beautiful surrounding is a pleasure. I also like your use of haze as it is something that can mask an important feature, which eventually reveals itself. Patience certainly gets rewarded here!

Valsa George

Date: 5/4/2024 11:11:00 PM

Dear Lasaad, you have opened your poem with a stunning first stanza. "I witnessed the dawn seraphic sapphire spike, I marveled at the world's exquisiteness strike. The colors shimmered in the first light glow, Cleansed by nature's tears of the night flow." Your poem captures the spectacular beauty of the rising sun. I have witnessed many beautiful sunrises and sunsets. But never could I absorb and reflect the beauty of the dawn in such a marvelous way. Your alliterations and the assonance they create are impeccable. Love the idea of the earth and the surroundings being cleansed by nature's tears. A lovely poem.

Ink Empress

Date: 5/4/2024 10:53:00 AM

How beautiful is this dr sotto! You are very good with rhymes, you do them effortlessly, and this is beyond impeccable with excellent diction and your use of poetic techniques and how youv painted imagery is so very aesthetically pleasing! I loved so many lines in this especially “ A solitary grain amid circular void space, Never did I predict leaping ways in a trace.“ that hits so hard and deep for me! sometimes we dont expect things but something happen, and leave us surprised.” The ending is soulfully divine and moving and heartfelf! A very sincere write youv delivered here! A fave it is fod me

Silent One

Date: 5/4/2024 10:28:00 AM

Your poem beautifully captures the awe-inspiring beauty of dawn and the profound impact it can have on one's perception of the world. The vivid imagery of the "dawn seraphic sapphire spike" and the world's "exquisiteness strike" immerses the reader in the transcendent moment of sunrise, where nature's colors shimmer in the first light and the landscape is cleansed by the tears of the night.

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/4/2024 9:13:00 AM

Dear Lasaad, your lush imagery, vivid metaphors and wonderful rhymes all combine to create a dazzling poem that stirs the senses, the imagination and the soul. Your golden pen spills with poetic devices like alliteration, assonance and internal rhymes to further enhance this lovely poetic experience. The glory of dawn and epiphany sumptuously expressed. Warmest wishes my poetry friend.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/4/2024 4:50:00 AM

Inspiring, uplifting words, my friend. Your poem invokes the beauty of dawn in its splendor.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/4/2024 4:32:00 AM

your words will linger with me as I step outside this morning for my daily walk in the dawn of the day. I stare at it reflecting, 'giving in to its might.' Well said. I enjoyed this alliterative line: I witnessed the dawn seraphic sapphire spike... Your poem beautifully captured a wonderous part of each day. Have a wonderful weekend, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara

Sally Eslinger

Date: 5/4/2024 3:33:00 AM

Wow, .sotto! A deep description of the process, the progression! and so very fine with its language and rhymes. Hugs, sally…..His blessing i do pray for your day!