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Dawn On Fire

blown apart her lewd locks of hair stretching arch ready to ensnare the dawn sets itself on fire rain hurries down to douse the heat soaked wet, vanity you secrete earth also smells full with desire hard log flamed, I burned to ash soft now I lie, on the ground, pride lost unsated, some more you require Nove Otto- 9 lines, syllable count 8,8,8,8,8,8,8,8,8 Contest: Light a Flame! Sponsor: Nette Onclaud write: 14.6.2014 Mohan Chutani

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Robert Lindley

Date: 6/22/2014 12:57:00 PM

Congrats on a fine win!!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/21/2014 6:19:00 PM

very nicely done, Mohan, Congrats on your awesome win.

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/21/2014 7:06:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. Mohan

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 6/21/2014 5:47:00 AM

Amazing write Mohan ! congrats on top merited win ! Nette's contests r tough n its all the more diff to score so high ! but u did it my dear friend !

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/21/2014 6:08:00 AM

Thanks Upma, your encouragement means a lot to me. Mohan

Faye Gibson

Date: 6/20/2014 6:16:00 PM

Mohan...you just blew the top off of this one. Great win. Congratulations.

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/20/2014 8:57:00 PM

Thanks Faye, I still feel that I have to learn a lot for you all experienced and distinguished poets out there. Mohan

Jan Allison

Date: 6/20/2014 3:05:00 PM

fabulous Mohan a well deserved winner. Hugs jan xxxx

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/20/2014 8:58:00 PM

Jan, thanks for your constant support. Mohan

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/20/2014 2:46:00 PM

stunning, impressive, and beautifully written piece that you have strung together with such vivid imagery.. this artwork comes to life for me, mohan.. cheers for the big win in my challenge.. huggs

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/20/2014 9:02:00 PM

Nette, a great thank you for this very big encouragement. Before the contest was judged, I did not get any comment on this write from anyone thinking that I had got it terribly wrong. I cherished your challenge and had tried to put in my best. Glad came out flaming in the end. love and huggs. Mohan

Mark J. Halliday

Date: 6/20/2014 1:49:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. MJH

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/20/2014 1:52:00 PM

grateful, Mark. Mohan

Arlene Smith

Date: 6/20/2014 1:00:00 PM

Congrats on a great win Mohan!.. Hugs.. Arlene

Mohan Chutani
Date: 6/20/2014 1:51:00 PM

Thanks Arlene.