Dark Room

I thought she was the light in a dark room. She had me circling the bright fumes but I did not know. She was the dark room.

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Barry Stebbings

Date: 4/27/2016 4:39:00 AM

Great write, well constructed. I like the expression of the revelation that 'She was the dark room'.

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/26/2016 12:02:00 PM

Great that you found out darkness masquerades as light. I have been with such dark room types far too many times myself. You have conveyed a deep and important message i short verse. A7

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 4/26/2016 11:34:00 AM

Interesting write and although it was short it packed a punch right in the emotional column! Great job! Laura Sometimes more can be said with less !!

Chante Reeves

Date: 4/25/2016 2:58:00 PM

LOVE!!!!!!!!!! short poems are my favs! right to the point and still very powerful.. the line spacing did something for me as well. Good Job! It would not let me send you message back sorry but i'll always support fellow poets! =)

Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/24/2016 8:51:00 PM

Dear Hani Short and sweet girl, but you've put forth alot within these lines of emotional content, totally enjoyed the read, I'll be back soon to check if you have something new posted, cheri d.

Eve Roper

Date: 4/19/2016 10:11:00 PM

I like the subject matter and the use of the simile modifiers for a dark poem. The person you thought she was, was not... The rhyme scheme "abba" (that is, where the first and fourth lines, and the second and third lines rhyme) for an Enclosed Rhyme. A 7 Hugs Eve