Dark Loss

He tried to fly flapped his wings High above him a dark duvet drizzled sadness Only yesterday, or was it last week his wings and feet carried him little raven didn't remember Carry me carry me he squeaked to his sorrowful parents We have to go they said hipping hither and thither He hid his head under his useless wings and waited and wailed *** September 17, 2017 7th place in contest: In The Dark sponsor: Russell Sivey

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Constance La France

Date: 9/22/2017 10:26:00 AM

Darren, CONGRATULATIONS on your win!.. this poem really touched my soul

Darren White
Date: 9/27/2017 7:02:00 AM

Thank you so very much Constance, I hope your health is improving now?

Eve Roper

Date: 9/22/2017 10:18:00 AM

Congratulations,Darren , wonderful write. Hugs Eve ~`*

Darren White
Date: 9/27/2017 7:01:00 AM

Thank you Eve :)

Lin Lane

Date: 9/22/2017 7:28:00 AM

What a sense of vulnerability you display in this one, Darren. I'm glad it made the winning list... Hugs.

Darren White
Date: 9/27/2017 7:01:00 AM

Thank you so much, Lin :)

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/22/2017 7:12:00 AM

Congrats!!! my friend on your placement...nicely penned Darren...god bless...^WW^

Darren White
Date: 9/27/2017 7:01:00 AM

Thank you so much WW

White Wolf

Date: 9/19/2017 1:27:00 AM

I do hope the sponsor sees the brilliance of this poem, Duir!

Darren White
Date: 9/19/2017 1:37:00 AM

Whatever happens, I love the poem, with or without contest. So good to see you my friend.

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 9/18/2017 10:19:00 PM

You are a raven Darren, most intelligent and wise of birds, it may not be on air you fly but you soar just the same. I like this write, your interpretation for this contest, and not just cuz I'm a crazy bird lady :) xomo!

Darren White
Date: 9/19/2017 1:36:00 AM

:) I love the dark metaphors, packaging emotions and real life happenings in them. Hugs ma mo <3