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Dark and Mystical

I watch as a shadow crosses the sun It's magnificent light turned to darkness Day has been banished consumed by the moon Ominous black sky not a single star It's magnificent light turned to darkness Are we witnessing the end of our world? Ominous black sky not a single star Even though it's day, it's darker than night Are we witnessing the end of the world A mystical day that has been fortold Even though it's day, it's darker than night A blade of bright light cuts through the darkness A mystical day that has been fortold Day has been banished consumed by the moon A blade of light cuts trough the darkness I watch as a shadow crosses the sun Written for Shadow Hamiltons "Dark and Mystical" contest Written March 31st, 2014

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Arlene Smith

Date: 6/16/2014 11:07:00 AM

Extraordinary writing, Richard.... A fan, my friend. Hugs.. Arlene..

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/7/2014 10:24:00 AM

First the title grabbed me then the write held me from start to finish. A truly great write my friend.... Congrats on the win!!!!!

Joseph May

Date: 4/13/2014 11:48:00 AM

Congrats on your win

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/13/2014 12:31:00 PM

Thanks Joseph.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/13/2014 6:21:00 AM

Days r really darker than night Richard ! Very true indeed ,, congrats on great win !!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/13/2014 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Upma.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/13/2014 1:12:00 AM

Wonderful win in the contest, congratulations. richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/13/2014 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Ram.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 4/12/2014 11:34:00 PM

Nice Richard... Congratulation on winning in Shadow's contest. Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/13/2014 8:03:00 AM

Thanks Verlena.

Skat A

Date: 4/12/2014 10:59:00 PM

Richard, awesome, just plain awesome , love ~SKAT~

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/13/2014 8:04:00 AM

Thanks SKAT

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/12/2014 7:08:00 PM

wonderful win...PD

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/12/2014 7:26:00 PM

Thanks Linda.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/12/2014 3:41:00 PM

the first stanza.. :) love it.. :) it's both a natural phenomena: lunar eclipse, the last sentence, both philosophical and with great imagery :)awesome write indeed :) CONGRATULATIONS SIR CHARD.. :) +=OLIVE_ELOI with a lil wave.. :D thanks for dropping by reading and commenting.. :) God bless you more.. :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/12/2014 3:43:00 PM

My pleasure. Thanks for your kindness.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 4/12/2014 2:36:00 PM

lovely Rick you caught the mood well congrats on placing and ty for taking part hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/12/2014 2:40:00 PM

You are back! I was so worried about you.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/6/2014 8:31:00 PM

Very nice Richard , we have two eclipse's in April and a grand cross :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/12/2014 2:50:00 PM

Thanks Debbie.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/6/2014 9:52:00 AM

Seems the whole world is focused on ending I wonder if that will help or hurt? Pull us from the brink or push us over? Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/6/2014 2:53:00 PM

We humans are a stubborn lot, Manhattan will end up underwater, the deserts will continue to expand and a massive earthquake will take out the west. Our bee's will further diminish in number and our crops will fail. Still man will not curb his greed and may in fact try to prosper from the destruction.

Paul Callus

Date: 4/6/2014 8:55:00 AM

Well executed Pantoum Richard; still have to try one of these, very tempting. // Like the angle you chose...darkness during the day and not at night...lunar eclipse. gl for the contest, too. // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/6/2014 9:16:00 AM

Thanks Paul a little luck couldn't hurt.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 4/5/2014 8:14:00 AM

No matter what you write, you manage to make the reader feel what you were feeling when you picked up a pen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/5/2014 8:57:00 AM

Thanks Monterey coming fromm talented communicator like yourself this honours me.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/5/2014 12:14:00 AM

another great write Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/5/2014 1:06:00 AM

Thanks so much Arthur.

Donna Jones

Date: 4/2/2014 8:26:00 AM

The message is loud and clear...and still reads as a work of art....nice job Richard....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2014 8:38:00 AM

Thanks Donna, I'm glad the underlying message came through.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 4/1/2014 7:23:00 PM

Hi Rich: The pantoum form works well for this dark and mystical theme. Good Luck in the contest. SuZ

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/2/2014 8:40:00 AM

Thanks a little luck wouldn't hurt.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/1/2014 7:26:00 AM

Tnks God for that hopeful blade of light which keep us believing the world can get better even if it seems as it is so close to its end..A deep message in your poem which says more than what s written between the lines.Excellemt! Tnks for yr reply comment re reading my tanka and for your prayers : )

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/1/2014 8:33:00 AM

My pleasure Charmain.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/31/2014 3:26:00 PM

It's beautiful....as is all you write. I just love those writes of your that are "free" inspiration. Hope I worded it better. I'm a die hard fan...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2014 10:21:00 PM

I think I enjoy free form the most but these forms tend to challenge me more. I feel like they sharpen my mind. Thanks for adding more thoughts I appreciate it Eileen. Hugs Rick. Mom the end so just getting home.

Chuck Melugin

Date: 3/31/2014 2:25:00 PM

The letter in the back of the book! Richard, you write and I'm Left.......in awe! 7 my best, chuck

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2014 2:52:00 PM

You are most kind Chuck, thanks!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2014 2:50:00 PM

I had to stay within the theme. I'm glad you still liked it even though it's a bit dark.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/31/2014 12:17:00 PM

Here I am! Thought I was going to go and read a poem from an earlier time, but you have posted today! Very good poem, Richard....It does have that feeling of doom and gloom...not what I generally like to read from you, but...that is part of life as well. hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/31/2014 2:51:00 PM

Thanks Eileen my message to you posted up on Chuck's message.