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Daniel

You loved her with all your being, but then she left you wounded Now you look at life without seeing, you feel your world has ended. Young at twenty five and twenty three, but hope for you just ceased To find someone though you were free, you've set your souls at peace She’d settle for unworthy men, just not to be alone again You gave up on love even then, seafarer who won’t sail in vain. Young hearts alone and lonely, but reaching to humanity Paths have crossed though wanting only, to find your own identity With curiosity and suspense, each with bated breath and still Could listen to your pulse’ cadence, life’s void the other one could fill. She was to you the blonde patience, you were the man she's longed for Your pens spoke with great eloquence, biding the time to come ashore Beside the fireplace waiting, her radiant face and open arms With love that set hearts blazing, found home in her dreams and charms. How sweet the taste of one’s first love, that not all preconceived notions Could have prepared you to think of, all the heated waves and oceans That you would sail with bravery, secure in her warm embrace In her there was no drudgery, bliss in her kiss, soft bed and lace. But did you find true love indeed? It must have been the one question That plagued as thoughts ebbed and receded, lost love, desire and passion For you have shared your lives four years, just building all your dreams Holding to each other in tears, rejoiced in her triumphs and schemes. And yet she threw it all away, turned her back on love that's sincere From your arms she went astray, went after what fed on her fear. Gave up the years of love so pure, after meeting another man Whose steadfastness she can’t be sure, as he abandoned his own clan. Still you loved and was always there, when she needed you ‘til the end During the storm you were her shelter, the lover whose love won’t bend. The past year you were just coasting, along the shores, not knowing when The wounds would heal and stop bleeding, wishing it’d stop right there and then. Daniel my brother you should start, forget her and what could have been Don’t let yourself fall apart, be strong, life’s more than what you have seen. Though you loved her with all your being, but then she left you wounded Now for your sake you should be thinking, it’s been a year, you should have mended. (From the true story of Daniel, soul brother and friend, and the song by Elton John) 01 February, 2015 Story Poem Contest Sponsor: Carol Eastman Contest

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Date: 7/14/2015 2:16:00 AM
Hi Kim, Congrats on Carol's story, poem CONTEST. Always ~~ LINDA ~~
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Date: 7/14/2015 12:30:00 AM
KIM,, Congratulations on your awesome story win. Love SKAT
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Date: 7/13/2015 5:10:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Kim:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/13/2015 2:18:00 PM
I enjoyed you eloquent and heartfelt lines of love lost, well done. Thanks
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Date: 7/10/2015 1:43:00 AM
KIM, CONGRATS ON YOUR ANY POEM WIN..... ALWAYS & FOREVER ~~LINDA~~
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Date: 7/9/2015 10:08:00 PM
what an amazing and sad story. Is this like an actual blood related brother of yours? I do love that song Daniel by Elton John and I could see traces of that in the poem.
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Date: 7/7/2015 3:49:00 PM
Kim,, thank you for supporting "my ANY POEM contest #7." Have a nice day. Love **SKAT**
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Date: 4/30/2015 3:13:00 AM
G'day Kim... a worthy story albeit sad and written well considering each line has many syllables. Well done Kim - Lindsay
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Date: 4/17/2015 12:20:00 PM
Hello Kim, This is such a beautiful write, so much contained within. A piece like this takes such a lot of writing. Terrific feelings and emotional build up. Such strong images created Kim. A big congratulations............John
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Date: 2/14/2015 2:25:00 AM
Excellent poem, Kim! Very well done indeed!! :-) john.
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Date: 2/11/2015 3:53:00 PM
Your emotions and wisdom wrap themselves around your words giving them strength and depth and we are left wanting more. Emile.
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Date: 2/12/2015 5:43:00 PM
Thank you, sire. Your words certainly encouraged me to give more time and focus to future creative attempts, as this one, which was not done in one sitting. Careful attention to Daniel's story and continuous consultations were done to make sure the poem version is as close to his story and detailed as much as possible, subject to the limits of my ability and the space provided for new poets. Grateful smiles from the land of thousand isles...Kim :)
Date: 2/4/2015 10:00:00 PM
Very nice rhyming and a great write. Very good flow and message is solid. A 7 from me. Bravo!!!
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Date: 2/3/2015 5:37:00 AM
Very good rhymes, Kim, and I know how difficultis to write rhymes in english! And very effective contents in your verses
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Date: 2/2/2015 9:17:00 AM
As always, I enjoyed reading this poem so much :)
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Date: 2/2/2015 8:00:00 AM
Very moving... My older brother is Daniel...used to listen all the time..Tim
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Date: 2/2/2015 1:18:00 AM
Just beautiful.
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Date: 2/1/2015 12:39:00 PM
- I love the song by Elton John, Daniel my brother - A beautiful and touching song .... and your poem also Kim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/1/2015 11:26:00 AM
This is a superb piece of well crafted prose...Excellent in every way!! :) john.
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Date: 2/1/2015 8:42:00 AM
Such a deep sad write inspired by such a beautiful song - a 7 from me:-) Hugs jan xxx
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