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Cutting the Ties

For many Long years I’ve lived In your SSssss HHhhh AAaaa DDddd OOooo WWww Your eyes Cannot hide Your lies Pure deception - now rejection I take my KNIFE===== s e v e r i n g The genetic Umbilical cord That once joined us Could you please contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 09 29 17

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John Hamilton

Date: 10/28/2017 8:21:00 PM

Very interesting layout Jan enjoyed, congrats on breaking the top ten new poems!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2017 7:27:00 AM

Thanks so much John I am delighted this poem has had such lovely comments:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/28/2017 5:32:00 PM

Creative, brilliant and angry, I love this write Jan. The format is awesome as well. Completely enjoyed! Belated congrats for your win too!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2017 5:44:00 PM

Many thanks Susan, I have no idea where these deep dark poems come from as i much prefer humour but I go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 10/23/2017 3:58:00 PM

I was in outer space when this was posted, but I'll favor it now.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 4:01:00 PM

Thanks so much Lin! It is so unlike my usual style but I never know where my muse will take me but i do love this poem!:-) hugs Jan xx

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 10/23/2017 8:02:00 AM

Wow! Your poem's words express every emotion with how they are arranged! Congrats Jan, for your WIN with this brilliant piece! ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2017 1:23:00 PM

Thanks so much Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 10/21/2017 9:02:00 AM

Jan, oh so creative and congratulations on your win in my contest, well done !

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2017 9:56:00 AM

Thank you SO SO much Constance I am delighted for the poem to get more exposure through your contest win:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 10/20/2017 11:03:00 PM

I still love this poem, congratulations on your win, Jan , great write . Hugs Eve ~`*

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2017 3:04:00 AM

I love it too Eve especially as it is so different from my usual style:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 10/20/2017 5:53:00 PM

Wow! Jan I missed this one! Fave and congratulations and big hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/20/2017 5:57:00 PM

Thanks Mo:-) I never know what my muse will come up with next:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 10/1/2017 11:39:00 AM

wow, love it Jan! Are you Darren White the 2nd? ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2017 4:30:00 PM

LOL no I'm Jan Allison the 1st lol:-) it was really good to be so creative with this poem the shadow idea was inspired by Arthur's picture and I built a dark poem around that idea:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 10/1/2017 11:33:00 AM

And she's a mind reader! WOW

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2017 4:30:00 PM

oh wow Judy its SO SO good to see you back on soup!:-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 10/1/2017 9:26:00 AM

Very well crafted my friend...the dark side of Jan...I like it...god bless...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2017 4:32:00 PM

I do surprise myself with my dark side as I much prefer the lighter side of life and write humour but the dark poems do come out occasionally:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/1/2017 12:23:00 AM

Your message and your arrangement are so impressive Jan. Chilling! Wonderfully composed! : )

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2017 4:33:00 PM

Thanks Connie I do like to surprise with a more serious poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan x

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/30/2017 8:02:00 PM

Jan, this was REALLY great thinking in your free verse. And I know the emotion behind it is so real. FAVE

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2017 4:35:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea, there are many layers to this poem and I hope no one misinterprets the final three lines!!!:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/29/2017 7:46:00 PM

Welcome to the dark side! :) Loved this one Jan, very creative.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/30/2017 2:23:00 AM

Thanks for the inspiration with the picture Black and white is so dramatic:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 9/29/2017 3:18:00 PM

I like how you did shadow..Very creative write Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2017 4:28:00 PM

That idea was inspired by a poem that Arthur Vaso posted and it had a picture of his shadow:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/29/2017 12:43:00 PM

- O.M.G. Jan (?!?!?) - Dramatic poem ... wooow - Hope all is well - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2017 1:46:00 PM

Yes all is fine anne-lise I wrote this yesterday I never know what my muse will come up with next and I do like to surprise with a none humourous poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/29/2017 12:26:00 PM

Oh :) awesome, Jan, what made you write this one.... I truly enjoyed this poem.. It's how I feel sometimes... sometimes...

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2017 12:37:00 PM

I'll mail you when I get home but it was great to write lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 9/29/2017 12:23:00 PM

Then you reached in and cut out his blackened heart.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/29/2017 12:25:00 PM

Lol Tim a bit deep and dark for me ... I wrote this one yesterday:-) hugs Jan xx