Cute

I felt this moment coming on before The anticipation of union The strange breach from friendship to romance I know he is pining for my touch, His eyes pour forth a passion I can barely dare to behold He talks to me softly, I listen attentively I am afraid of him I am afraid to move forward or away He clasps my hands And we laugh, and I sigh with relief We are both scared That is a great comfort He says, “You are so cute.” And I say, “No, I’m an idiot. I’m stupid around you The words I say literally make no sense! When you speak, you make my IQ drop, My innards flop, You make me oh so weak You are HOT, In every single way Your lips, they sing to me They challenge me to play Your eyes, they take me to your dreams I want to be lost with you And never be found I want to kiss you I want to never again miss you.” Okay, I didn’t say all that, But I did say, “So are you….sort of. Just a little.” ;)

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/18/2016 2:07:00 AM

Well I AM quite adorable ... thanks for noticing ... ;) (not really ... I got a cue-ball head that's balding so I just shave it off like Mr. Clean)

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/18/2016 7:36:00 PM

Awwwh! >///< heehee I'll chop off a couple of curls if ya want ;) hahaha Nah, you cute so shush. <3 ~Laura

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/15/2016 6:05:00 PM

Ha ha ... I loved this awkward side of you, Laura. Very accurate and relate-able. The penultimate stanza? Reads like romantic comedy of those deep inner feelings that we never say. Last two lines? Uncensored reality ... in all its awkward glory. Your poem was cute (but just a little).

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 6:41:00 PM

Awkwardness is my gift....annnnd curse. Mostly curse. XD Guess it comes with being an introvert. oooo "penultimate"..fancy ^....^ Thanks so much for this adorable comment that made me smile. ~Laura

Davina Browne

Date: 10/12/2015 1:29:00 PM

I really like this one. This is also very true. Damn your to good love love it Laura

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/13/2015 12:00:00 AM

Awwww...thanks Davina. I promise I'll make time to read some more of your newer posts. Welcome back!! I've missed your awesomeness. ~Laura

Anita Sharma

Date: 10/12/2015 11:25:00 AM

very beautiful write laura.You make me oh so weak You are HOT, In every single way Your lips, they sing to me They challenge me to play,,loved a lot

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/13/2015 12:00:00 AM

Yay! Glad you liked those passionate lines. :) ~Laura

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 10/12/2015 1:31:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this Laura, your such a great writer.....thanks for shared this excellent gem.....love always.............A.M.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/12/2015 3:05:00 AM

Thanks so much for the sweet encouragement Afolabi. Will be checking out your page soon! ~Laura

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/11/2015 10:51:00 PM

Laura, I enjoyed reading this write very much. It was as though I was reading a good romance novel. When I'm reading a great love story I get lost in the write. That's the feeling I felt while reading this "cute" write. Good job. I'm glad I came across it tonight:-)Alexis 7

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/11/2015 11:15:00 PM

So glad you enjoyed reading, Alexis! : ) ~Laura

Kp Nunez

Date: 10/10/2015 9:36:00 PM

Cute indeed, and certainly sweet. Can imagine the scene, my dear...haha. This is nice...shows what a versatile writer you are! Missed you. hugs!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/11/2015 4:39:00 PM

You are so sweet yourself. I WILL get to reading your poems. Sorry Ive been away so long. ~Laura

Duke Beaufort

Date: 10/10/2015 2:51:00 PM

They say that these things happen when we stop trying. You are a very sweet. We all wish you the best of luck in the romantic circuit! May you have fun beyond belief and enjoy each moment. From what you have written--it sounds like you are having a great time. I am a firm believer that each moment has something to give to us. Thank-you again for your lovely expression of feeling.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/11/2015 4:41:00 PM

Awwww...thank you dear. Unfortunately this crazy guy hasn't been in my life for a while. We still bump into each other from time to time. Thanks again for taking the time to read and leave an encouraging comment. ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/10/2015 2:43:00 AM

You are very cute when you play heart quest Laura. "I want to be lost with you, and never found, I want to kiss you, I want to never again miss you..." Aaahhhhhh, gosh thats innocent romance and dare that makes me tingle...leave it to you to show that shared nervousness can be beautiful, inviting. I must go dream now...J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/10/2015 3:31:00 AM

Awww(: Nervousness is pretty damn cute, though it is super-dee-dooper contagious. ~Laura