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Curtains

Sister, don’t look out, the nights are drawing in, Keep your eyes from the bleeding light, The crushed body of the day. We should not, ever, look too long into the (dying) sun. Pull the curtains, feel the thick velvet, see the folds Fall heavily, dreamily into their appointed place, The sherry awaits, sweet night’s liqueur. Close the door, the moths are getting in, Seduced and unprotected, they spin up into the Lights we heavy-shaded into duskened lustre, Whirring, flapping, burning. Whatever happened, sister, to our loves, so soon departed? Death is desertion. Each night we lie in our beds, alone, Only the tick-tocking of clocks mocking. An owl, Perhaps. The world at a distance.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 12/14/2010 8:51:00 PM
Paul, I just read a few of the immediate comments below mine. They are right. Like John said, poets avoid reading the longer poems, particularly if you are somewhat new and have not commented to others first to get to know them. Second, it's the all in the timing and the number of poems you post. I'll go to your blog. Am running out of space here .By the way, this is a very good poem! andrea
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Date: 12/14/2010 6:42:00 PM
The proof is in the pudding Paul. Folks just will not take the time to read longer poems when they are pressed for time. No matter how good your poem is. That is what I believe is the simple difference that is proven here. Agape, Moses
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Date: 12/14/2010 4:57:00 PM
another wonderful write, another reason for not getting comments is YOU have to give a ton of comments before anyone starts giving them too you, also, most will not give a critique, I promise to read your free verse if you read mine ;) Light & Love
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Date: 12/14/2010 12:41:00 PM
This poem deserves all the views and comments it received, I just love it, you had me enthralled from the first word~~ excellent work~~
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Date: 9/9/2010 4:20:00 PM
Congradulations on having your poem featured Paul, I am pleased to have read this, enjoyed, and best wishes to your upcoming days..P.D.
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Date: 7/18/2010 10:50:00 AM
wow, very interesting this is. Glad to have read this one. GREAT writing. Such a sad tone to this. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 7/18/2010 8:43:00 AM
Wow. I love everything about this poem; there's a style to it that I don't think I've ever heard before. Faving! :) -G
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Date: 7/12/2010 10:54:00 AM
Enjoyed this poetry from you today and will read more, please check out my recent Criminals part 3 of course Fiction. Have a great day.
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Date: 7/4/2010 11:13:00 AM
Loved this here.. I'm new so have mercy and I hope you have an open mind my styles pretty different. Enjoy ya day
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Date: 5/16/2010 9:03:00 AM
Enjoyed this piece here. when we read, take in, love, we tend to get better at our craft. Enjoyed this piece here and have a great Sunday.:)
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Date: 5/11/2010 1:14:00 AM
Thanks to you all for these helpful and encouraging comments!
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Date: 5/8/2010 4:43:00 PM
Kinda sad but filled with descriptive, emotive, and metaphoric language...Keep the creative pen flowing..Sara
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Date: 5/8/2010 5:27:00 AM
I agree, well writen!!
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Date: 5/8/2010 1:29:00 AM
deep passion in this write, i like the way you compare the empty feeling to a tune of dead, enjoyed,..p.d.
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