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Cruizer

He drives around, picking up girlz. Proudly displaying his emoticon bumpertricker. His vomitrocious personality, hidden behind smiley face lie. The master of snark, with an old man's easy style. Try not to look into those grue eyes. His is a pretend wise with a fake smile. He'll fill your mind with pretentious smog. Your heart to clog, with consummating tobacco. He'll blow smoke up your donkey, from his corngobbed pipe. Fifties fedora, a bodacious tie. Hair colored in black dye, he wears a crisp white shirt. Disguising inner dirt and devious smile. Don't be blind, he's not worth a dime. He'll leave you high and dry, you'll wonder why. Why did you accept that ride? Debbie Guzzi's Portmanteaus contest. Emoticon My word... Bumpertricker Vomitrocious Snark Grue Smog My word ....Corngobbed Bodacious

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/4/2014 6:39:00 AM

Interesting write. Congrats on the win, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/4/2014 9:23:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Ram

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/3/2014 5:14:00 PM

ooohh, he sounds like someone from a stephen king novel. Great descriptions with portmanteous. I wonder if that P word is now ingrained on my brain forever, or if I will forget it a year from now when I want to use it in a sentence!! Sure enjoyed this one. Congrats to you.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2014 5:43:00 PM

Thanks Andrea.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/3/2014 12:14:00 PM

Astounding winner..Way to go..Congrats..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2014 5:43:00 PM

Thanks Sarah.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/17/2014 5:50:00 AM

Such vivid descriptions, I can just picture him. Love the inventive word play.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/17/2014 7:40:00 AM

Thanks again Monterey. I am off to see if you have posted a new poem.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 8/15/2014 3:29:00 PM

Pristine wordplay my new Canadian friend. This sounds like my uncle cruisin' Daytona Beach!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/16/2014 9:34:00 AM

Ha ha, does he drive a Lincon??

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 8/15/2014 3:12:00 PM

Nicely done Richard... GL in the contest. Debbie tends to be hard to please; however, this she win a high rating... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/15/2014 3:18:00 PM

Thanks again Verlen. Hugs Rick.

J. R. Corbin

Date: 8/15/2014 8:47:00 AM

Okay, Richard, if this doesn't win, it should. Absolutely delightful. I love the colorful descriptions. Kinda reminded me of Dr. Seuss, 'You're a Mean One, Mr. Grinch'.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/15/2014 9:04:00 AM

Thanks J.R.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/14/2014 7:00:00 PM

yup yup right on the money Light & Love!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2014 5:50:00 PM

Hi Debbie, you said I was right on the money yet I barely made the winners list. Did I miss something???

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/15/2014 9:03:00 AM

Hi Debbie, this was an interesting challange. I enjoyed writing for your contest.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/14/2014 11:55:00 AM

i love it. witty and well thought out. actually brilliant. thank you.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/15/2014 9:02:00 AM

Thankyou for your kind visit Maurice.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/14/2014 8:04:00 AM

At first I wondered the form , the word play but now see it is a contest write and you did so very well my friend. Surely a winner methinks..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/14/2014 8:28:00 AM

Hi Robert, I thank you for your vote of confidence.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 8/14/2014 1:54:00 AM

Seems to be abt sb tryin to b a ladykiller conman. I enjoyd the awesome diction and wording here which made for an interestin poem. So nice to read u again poet richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/14/2014 8:31:00 AM

It is about a pimp recruiting young girls and promising them what they think they need. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/14/2014 12:28:00 AM

GOOD job. I researched for this one but just have not had the time to sit down and think what to do with the array of juicy words I found. so fun, huh?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/14/2014 8:32:00 AM

I found this contest intriguing. I am curious to see what you come up with.

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/13/2014 8:46:00 PM

Reading a castigating poem like this just makes me grateful that I'm honest, sincere, and appreciative to the people in my life Richard. The admonishment in this poem is so coloful and goodwilled. I respect this write, important message. Xool word play too. J.A.B.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/14/2014 8:37:00 AM

I may been my dictionary to decipher this comment *lol*. Thanks for stopping by, I always appreciate your visits.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 8/13/2014 5:36:00 PM

'He'll blow smoke up your donkey'...Hilarious! I think we have a winner here...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/14/2014 8:39:00 AM

I hope you are right. I'm glad you enjoyed my word play. Thanks for commenting.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/13/2014 9:15:00 AM

hmmmmmmm....so what is this contest all about then. Very interesting and mind boggling...You sure knew how to play with your words, Mr L.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/13/2014 9:39:00 AM

Hi Eileen, go read Debbie's description, it will all make sense. Thanks for being the first to comment.