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Crackled

_ _ _ _While walking one day in crisp autumn air, On the edge of the sidewalk, I saw it so clearly_ _ _ _ a worn leather wallet.... (at least, I had thought it) But with C L O S E R inspection, it took no detection, .....to see my mistake, in a quick double take It was a lone, shabby leaf,............ which I gladly retrieved It makes my heart grieve...............when time turns the leaves verdant green, into brown.............which we can't turn around.... Time is lost in a flash...................is it too much to ask, that the seasons slow down, or the reasons are sound? There was amber beneath............................... this worn crackling leaf with some gold clinging too, ............................as if giving us clues that our fleeting days dwindle,..........................like the flame of a candle @ g @ n @ i @ s i @@ I saw smoke, nearby, r from leaves left for burning,.. and no one was stirring, which seems quite surprising @ o u @@ * * This m n d left to smolder, on a day growing colder* * In the palm of my hand, it f" l "u "t" t" e "r "e" d to please me, then it s" h" u "t" t"e" r "e "d in breezes, with tangible FEAR! Above in the trees, birds were singing in chorus... While the branches were swinging.....in sync with the verses "Blossom to blossom.. Green leaves are sprouting", "Leaves turn to rust....Then to ash in one flash" "Ashes to ashes...'Till dust turns to dust"... . . . My poor fragile keepsake, "q"u"a"k"e"d" in the wake of s-h-a-t-t-e-r-i-n-g sadness :) f a l l i n g into a million p i e c e s and t-h-r-o-u-g-h my fingers, into e t e r n i t y . . . . __________________________________ "Creative Layout" Contest

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Date: 6/18/2016 2:50:00 PM
Carrie, congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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Date: 3/23/2014 3:32:00 PM
wow.. awed by this unique style from you, carrie.. you don;t lose focus even with this shape.. sweet congrats with huggs
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Date: 3/22/2014 9:23:00 PM
Very clever creation, Congrats on the fine win, carrie
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Date: 3/22/2014 7:41:00 PM
hot damn, now that's original! ;) Congrad's on your win Light & Love
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Date: 3/22/2014 7:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win Carrie... The way she express this in appearance is quite amazing. How you do that? Verlena
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Date: 3/22/2014 6:29:00 PM
Awesome poem Carrie, very sorry to see you weren't inspired anew. This poem offers shape and message. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/5/2013 3:44:00 PM
congratulations with the awesome layout Carrie... xox..Linda
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Date: 9/5/2013 8:56:00 AM
. F a l l i n g Winning work..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 9/4/2013 3:27:00 PM
Very creative. But, even without the creative formatting - the words themselves make for a lovely poem. Nice job ... as usual.
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Date: 9/1/2013 3:44:00 PM
Very nice! You managed to include an amazing number of unusual forms. Congratulations on winning... Jack
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Date: 9/1/2013 2:19:00 PM
Yes, this takes the CAKE for creative layout!!! Congratulations, artist carrie!!! you painted a great word picture.
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Date: 9/1/2013 1:40:00 PM
congratulations in the creative layout contest.... SKAT
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Date: 8/31/2013 5:01:00 PM
Carrie, a big congratulations on first place in my Creative Layouts Contest, with your amazing creative layout and wonderful writing skill, this is beyond my expectations, just wonderful, Constance
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Date: 8/12/2013 10:03:00 AM
btw, I will reply soon, I have to sleep now but wanted to let you know... thank you for being such a wonderful friend! Sending you hugs as well :)
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Date: 8/12/2013 10:01:00 AM
You just got me smiling here, Carrie! I am such a sucker for such lay-outs in poems and this was a delight to read! I especially liked your premise here, about that "crackled" leaf-- funny how you wrote about this since just the other day, I was walking home and particularly avoided stepping on the dried leaves, just thinking of it (actually it reminded me of this Enid Blyton story where they were actually fairies)...I love how you put in some rhyme here too! I hope this scores super high!
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Date: 8/12/2013 9:10:00 AM
Absolutely spectacular, Carrie!!! The effort, alone, was impeccable. The message in this piece, deeper than that. Damn fine job!
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Date: 8/12/2013 2:39:00 AM
My dear friend you have made the departed and sad leaf immortal by giving such beautiful tribute and that too with all your sketches and designs without a pencil and rubber. Carrie this is really superb write. My good wishes for your lovely Poem. I have placed a new Poem cum POP Song today on Poetry Soup as the Song IS placed on You Tube. Shall be thankful if you can leave your comments on PS and on You Tube also. The URL is given in my Poem. Sorry Carrie for not being regular on PS. Love&BW
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