Corrosion and Rust

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This is what I was seeing..I am sure that something could be done to reduce this but at what cost?...It made me wonder how safe was the buildings that had metal in their framework..

The ocean's waves steadily ebb and flow, constant moisture source. A source of corrosion and rust to all metal resources. A home by the ocean's beauty with charm, relaxation. Then I saw the rust everywhere_ Minus dandelion By the sea storing treasures up, where moth and rust corrupt. Is this where I truly want to be? No, soul's praises erupt. Sponsor: Brian Strand Contest:XII any form/theme Matt.6:19 Poulter's Measure

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Chittaranjan Dey

Date: 4/16/2012 7:17:00 AM

This is superb dear poetess.

Tim B

Date: 4/15/2012 6:50:00 PM

Mrs. Sara, a stirring poem. I agree, what have we to gain storing up all these earthly treasures, when the thieves ought break in and steal them. Store thy riches in heaven. I particularly like that the poem gave a sense of ebb and flow as to go with the nautical theme. Great stuff as always. One note, you would probably catch it anyway but, 'Is that where want to really be?' did you mean to say, 'Is that where we want to really be?' If not, beg my pardon, just trying to be helpful :).

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/15/2012 4:02:00 PM

This poem is a beauty Sara! - Wish you all the best in contest! - oxox love Anne-Lise

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/15/2012 12:40:00 PM

a soulful, reflective write, sara.. special congrats on your fine win!... huggs to you, the family and karter! :)

Jack Horne

Date: 4/15/2012 11:48:00 AM

my, what a beautiful and deep write this is, my friend. many congrats on your wins

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet

Date: 4/14/2012 9:06:00 PM

I love this.It is certainly articulate.well done.

Diana Mohammed

Date: 4/14/2012 2:43:00 PM

I like this Sara... I can just 'soul's praises' at the end!! ... Thanks for sharing - Love Diana

Jared Pickett

Date: 4/14/2012 10:13:00 AM

It is amazing the things that inspire us to write. Rust and corrosion, what an interesting concept! Is this a metaphor for life as we know it? There are times when I feel as though my heart is rusting and at times a bit corroded.. Well done my friend, keep the creative pen flowing!!!...:JP)