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Conversation With the Sun

I arose upon a morning, where the sun has used a brighter voice A change in tone, with softer words, and has dusted off his better mood The sun has said, 'good morning' and now I have a better choice I'll sweep the doldrums, with the breeze, and shoo the clouds that brood Early dawn was washed anew, and met the sun with drops of rain to sweep the cobwebs from my brain, and clear the day ahead It is not that I will grumble, with thoughts that dim the sun again… Chores, for once, can wait awhile, while rainbows clear my head I look outside the window ledge, and like what I can see Those gloomy clouds are breaking up, while I sip a cup of tea The frown upon my forehead, which was such a part of me has disappeared, soothed away, like sunshine through the trees The colors of a rainbow’s view, now chases blues away The sun peeks in to say "adieu", and brightens up my day ______________________________________________________________ For Elly Wouterse's: Positive Sonnet Encore Contest 7/7/14

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Date: 9/5/2014 11:01:00 AM
Magnificent write Carrie! Congrats on huge win!
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Date: 9/4/2014 3:07:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie. Nicely done.
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Date: 9/3/2014 10:57:00 PM
WOW... WOW>..PD
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Date: 9/3/2014 6:12:00 PM
beautifully penned Carrie many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/13/2014 3:55:00 PM
Carrie well chosen words for a bright conversation....David
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Date: 7/12/2014 8:27:00 AM
This is very nice, Carrie. I love to watch the changes of the morning. The sounds and images set the tone for the whole day. Nicely written with great rhymes.... Robert.
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Date: 7/8/2014 7:54:00 AM
I enjoyed your conversation. Instead of I sip on my tea consider I sip here on my tea. Or I sip upon my tea. It adds another beat and helps with the rhythm of the piece.
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Date: 7/8/2014 3:37:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed. Tfs
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