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Concrete Angel

She came down from above. Through the wind and the rain. All she carried was love. She stood tall. As she took it all. This day was bound. Death was always near. Wanted to carry the flames. If she make's it through. This concrete life of pain. She'll see butterflies, not tears. I know she has angels near her. They'd like to take her home. Though she chooses to stay here. I see her delicate fluttering wings. Of flaming silver, blue and gold. She must learn to use them. That's all it will take, for her to fly. From this perverted degrading place. 6pm 5/7/2012

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 8/3/2013 11:17:00 AM

Hi Debbie, hope to read more of your very touching poetry.... The Angels can't heal them but they can be a comfort.... wonderful poem you have written

Debbie Duncan
Date: 8/3/2013 3:29:00 PM

Thank you Karen ;}

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/2/2013 10:48:00 PM

Hauntingly sad, Debbie...but beautiful in flow. Very touching write. Hope all is well.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 5/2/2013 11:01:00 PM

Thank you ;}

Robert Johnson

Date: 4/23/2013 1:49:00 PM

Makes more sense once you explained the shriners childrens hospital. The human essence still stands. God bless us all. Peace. :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/23/2013 3:02:00 PM

;} guess I should write it up there

Don Johnson

Date: 4/23/2013 12:35:00 AM

the ever helpful angels, we meet along the way, ones who will pick you up, till you are happy, bloody aye

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/23/2013 2:22:00 AM

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Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/22/2013 5:11:00 PM

Great visual write.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/22/2013 5:34:00 PM

thank you ;}

Robert Johnson

Date: 4/22/2013 5:04:00 PM

Speaks to the very essence of humanity that dwells in each of us. May soft breezes give her lift. Peace. :)

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/22/2013 6:13:00 PM

thank you ;}

Valerie The Heavy Hearted Poet

Date: 4/22/2013 7:59:00 AM

When I read this, I could feel the pain and torment. This is a poem that sends a powerful message. It was a privilege reading your pem today. Thank you!!!

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/22/2013 2:20:00 PM

Thank you ;}

Jack Jordan

Date: 4/21/2013 9:30:00 PM

There's powerful imagery in your poem; very visual (show, don't tell...). Nice work... Jack

Donna Jones

Date: 4/21/2013 6:33:00 PM

I believe we do have angels on our shoulders when we need them...great poem Debbie....

Richard D Seal

Date: 4/21/2013 4:58:00 PM

Hi Debbie, Yes very good, sometimes the world can get you down. Take care,Richard

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/21/2013 11:04:00 PM

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Poet Tacito

Date: 4/21/2013 3:08:00 PM

A stunning piece. A harsh reality check. I highly enjoyed this.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/21/2013 10:39:00 PM

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 4/21/2013 1:31:00 PM

Debbie, Very quality write. I like your perspective on this subject. I am attempting to write a poem about death. This one is superb

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/21/2013 5:43:00 PM

thank you Karen ;}

Shining Bright

Date: 4/21/2013 12:50:00 PM

Beautiful writing

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/21/2013 5:42:00 PM

thank you ;}

John Loving Iii

Date: 4/20/2013 3:22:00 PM

not the whole earth... some are kind or else their are no angels. we just have to look under their present state.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 6:15:00 PM

no, not the whole earth ;}

Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/20/2013 10:07:00 AM

the world, but this story has pre-empted it all. I hope your wings are strong and thank you for all your kind comments. Perhaps I will decide to write something soon.

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 6:10:00 PM

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/20/2013 9:58:00 AM

I hope you don't mean that the whole earth is perverted and degrading. I thought I was the only one who thought like that. Actually, there are some wonderful things, but it's getting harder and harder to resist the culture of selfishness we have. I really like how you took some inspiration from Debra. From your work and comments, I believe you do have wings. Nice hearing from you as always. I am so bludgeoned by Boston right now, I can't think. There is more happening in the rest of....

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 5:45:00 PM

thanks for reading Duke ;}

Debra Squyres

Date: 4/20/2013 7:03:00 AM

Wow... this is good !!! Emotional piece !!! Thanks for reading and commenting on my two Angel poems... I like where you took this one..into the concrete of reality

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 5:28:00 PM

thank you Debbie ;}

Jack Horne

Date: 4/19/2013 2:39:00 PM

emotive write indeed, my friend

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 1:19:00 AM

thank you

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/18/2013 3:27:00 PM

Very expressive and emotive work that you have penned in this one..Enjoyed reading today..Thanks for stopping by..I hope that this is just a work not anyone in your life right now..Sara

Debbie Duncan
Date: 4/20/2013 12:58:00 AM

thank you Sara for reading;}