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Concerto In Sun Major

As rain washes away the darkness of the prior night The morning showers pay tribute to the maestro with beat As the sun waits for its chance to contribute to the melody The curtain of the clouds sways with each sounding resonation Upon the break of the clouds, as curtains then open The sun makes a grand entrance, intensified by lingering drops As if each drop was a drum sound representing a footstep Of the sun moving forward to take the center stage

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 7/23/2008 11:37:00 PM
Nice mixture of sight & sounds Michael.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 7/23/2008 2:31:00 PM
Great title--creative poem!!! Nice use of personification. I enjoyed this one. Keep on writing! Karen
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Date: 7/23/2008 1:08:00 PM
I will appreciate this more tomorrow, when the sun is due to return. When it does, I will remember this beautiful poem. Love, Shar
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Date: 7/23/2008 11:50:00 AM
Hello Michael A beautiful poetic write. I especially like the line "As if each dorop was a drum sound representing a footstep" Overall a indepth masterful poetic write. Amazing, One of my favorites of yours so far. Love Light Truth Patricia
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Date: 7/23/2008 10:41:00 AM
I'm very fond of long lines, which may surprise people who think of Tanka as short line poetry. But my Tanka tend to maximum length. Anyway, I really like the way the long lines sustain the image through the whole poem. One small nit; I would put a "the" before "beat" at the end of L2, mainly for rhythmic reasons.
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Date: 7/23/2008 7:58:00 AM
This poem is outstanding in it's beauty! It is not only beautiful to read, but it's as if one can hear the music! Makes me want to close my eyes and drink it in! A lovely way to start my morning!....Fondly, Carrie
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