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Below is the poem entitled Commotion which was written by poet Destiny Echo. Please feel free to comment on this poem. However, please remember, PoetrySoup is a place of encouragement and growth.

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Emotions cause commotion

feelings deeper than the ocean

i’m choking and hoping and praying

and I’m just saying

that I hope I can survive

cause I really love life

but I’ve got a knife

stuck in my back, attack, attack

I put it there myself & I can’t rip it out

my throat is swollen, I can’t shout

it’s hard to breathe, I can’t scream

I can’t dream, I can’t do anything

I’m paralyzed in the heart

And I’m paralyzed in the mind

Sometimes I just wish I could leave this all behind

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  1. Date: 5/24/2010 11:57:00 AM
    Awesome Write Destiny.....Larry

  1. Date: 5/5/2010 9:10:00 PM
    powerful piece

  1. Date: 5/5/2010 7:33:00 PM
    Nice expressions of thoughts

  1. Date: 5/5/2010 12:35:00 PM
    Sounds like a confused, painful situation...There is light at the end of the tunnel just focus on that light....Very emotive and expressive write that you have penned in this one...Keep the creative pen flowing...Sara

  1. Date: 5/5/2010 12:24:00 PM
    well done Destiny, enjoyed,..p.d