Comatose

Comatose: inspired by Insomniac by Maya Angelou, for Joann’s Copycat contest There are some morns when Sleep conquers, Heavy and masterful. And all the tricks That I groggily try To shake it from my head Are futile as raising the dead, And much less hopeful.

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/1/2012 10:25:00 AM

jack, congratulations in Joann's "copy cat contest" have yourself a great day.. ~LUV~PD

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/30/2012 7:08:00 AM

Congratulations on your placement in Joann's "Copy Cat" contest Jack. Sorry to be late commenting. Love, Carol

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/28/2012 5:48:00 PM

You really nailed the feeling, sometimes I think I wake up sit up..even get up only to find I still am alseeP! Haven't moved a jot, horrid feeling! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2012 5:40:00 PM

I really need to read this poem of maya Angelou's sometime!! Maybe yours is even better!!! Big congrats, Jack. I am happy this one made the winners' list.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 8/27/2012 1:15:00 PM

I imagine Maya has inspired a whole generation of poets. Good job with her work. Congratulations.

David Williams

Date: 8/16/2012 3:52:00 AM

Jack I had to read Maya's poem, you did an outstanding job, well done and good luck...David

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/15/2012 10:57:00 PM

Jack, this is interesting...good luck in the contest......love it..:-) Thank you for sharing * Goodnight~ PD

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/15/2012 8:34:00 PM

That must be a cool poem you copy catted. She is a revered writer! I feel like this almost every morning!!

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/15/2012 5:10:00 PM

This is such a marvelous write my friend! I really enjoyed the creativity you exuded within this poem...a great copycat! What a wondrous piece, Great Work!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/15/2012 4:17:00 PM

Cute one..Yes, some children more so teens can't seem to go to sleep and then one has to set off an explosion to wake them up..Enjoyed reading this eve..Thanks for stopping by...Sara