Collapsed

Collapsed Why am I standing here feeling naked and alone? How did I even arrive here from where I've been? I use to have everything in perfect picture order, perfect life, perfect family, perfect job, perfect friends... But how did I get here again to this time and place? Oh yah it's because I lost every perfect everything One day on top of the world, the next day totally ruined This building is so high, do you think I might grow wings... It's all so hard to grasp, I mean even my family left Wife just took our kids then kissed me on the forehead, smiled sadly, turned around, and walked out the door You see that's why I'm jumping because I'm already dead... A day that will be remembered throughout all history The day when everything collapsed in our financial world Ruined in one minute, it's so baffling, now I'm nothing I step over the ledge do a somersault and a final twirl... 05/22/16

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/23/2016 3:20:00 PM

This is really great work, Brian. Going into that dark area that is so great to explore from time to time. i enjoyed how the format looked like bird wings. When he falls, maybe he will sprout wings and be able to fly away to a better place. I hope so in spirit at least! Was this for a challenge of any sort? I am so happy you liked my Daddy poem. thanks for the inspiration.

Brian Davey
Date: 5/23/2016 5:09:00 PM

Thank you Andrea am glad that you like my write and yes hopefully he did sprout wings after he jumped at least he'll be in Heaven then, who knows? And thank you for inspiring me back! Have a great day

Probir Gupta

Date: 5/23/2016 12:29:00 AM

How beautiful the collapse has become in the hands of poetry... and of course through the cerebral window of the poet...

Brian Davey
Date: 5/23/2016 2:38:00 AM

Thank you for such kind words Probir

Constance La France

Date: 5/22/2016 11:59:00 PM

Brian, wow, what a fascinating write, I was enthralled from word one, and I love the layout too... 7

Brian Davey
Date: 5/23/2016 2:37:00 AM

thank you so much Constance it gives me great pleasure to hear that I captivated you with my write!

Jesse Day

Date: 5/22/2016 5:53:00 PM

Exellent read - words add power to the why and how of suicide - feel the history of the great depression revisited. Complex and beautifully written -

Brian Davey
Date: 5/22/2016 7:09:00 PM

Thank you so very much for your kind words I am happy that you enjoyed it!