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Coldblooded

His long, sleek, diamond clad body, more coldblooded than vampires; no second life offered his prey. Lying in venomous wait, he'll rattle you with a warning while aiming his deadly kiss. Arlene Smith 01/15/15 Contest: Night creatures Sponsor: Nette Onclaud No. 2--rattlesnake

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Emile Pinet

Date: 1/23/2015 9:57:00 AM

I hate snakes , but I like this. well done.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 1/21/2015 9:19:00 AM

Your poem has a scary feel to match the real thing. I was bitten by a rattlesnake a few years back.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/20/2015 7:14:00 PM

Love that last part. He will rattle his warning and give a deadly kiss!! Nice job.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 1/20/2015 5:07:00 PM

well portrayed Arlene gl in contest hugs 7

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/20/2015 5:50:00 AM

Reads like a winner..I faced a rattler in my herb garden a few years back..When I first saw it, I thought it was a chicken snake like we have around here..Then I saw its diamond shaped head and knew it was venomous..I had a knife in my hand about 6 inches or maybe 8 inches long..I tried to stab it with the knife..It coiled and prepared to strike with its mouth open and fangs showing..When it dropped to crawl off, I tried to get it right behind its head with the knife..Scary episode..SK

Sara Kendrick
Date: 1/20/2015 5:51:00 AM

I told it you just go on down in the woods and stay there..It crawled off ..I don't know if it died or not..Sara