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she build the walls much higher than before for she remembered well the sting of pain her citadel of heart could not take more the weakened roof let in the acid rain she fortified the structure with her fears a mortar of regret on every wall the open spaces filled with hardened tears this edifice of strength would never fall the work complete, she looked with searching eyes to find a place where one could enter in should this be found, it would be her demise she'd fall to Hades from her paradise The walls all fixed, her heart in good repair though haunted it would be; no soul lived there Eileen Manassian

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Shane Cooper

Date: 8/2/2015 9:59:00 PM

My friend this is a sad sonet. I do think that to build high walls of adament around your heart is going to bring you to paradise, nor do i think it will lessen your pain. To hold no one in your heart but a dark reflection of yourself, is a terrible thing. That path leads to madness. I have put this poem in my favourites because it is beautifully written. Even though so terribly sad. love Shane xxx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/31/2015 12:34:00 AM

oh now this is one I missed that is not old at all. It's got excellent sonnet meter, Eileen. Am I missing something? Didn't you use to say meter was hard for you? Or am I mixing you up with someone else, because this is perfect with it! Thanks for telling me my typo, and now I have one for you!! Do you mean built in line one? I think it is so cool we are both teachers and can correct each other!!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/31/2015 12:23:00 AM

What a beauty dearest Eileen! U r gem of a poet my friend, keep the golden ink flowing!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/31/2015 12:30:00 AM

Thank you, my dear sweet Dr. Upma. God bless you for your kindness to me. Sending you hugs....

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 7/30/2015 11:54:00 AM

A very haunting, beautiful sonnet here. The second stanza is awesome in particular, though I love every word! The effects of pain are tragic. Strength doesn't always require soul. Always, Laura

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/31/2015 12:31:00 AM

Thank you, dear, for your visit! You brighten my day with your lovely comments. You are an amazing woman, Laura. Hugs

Kim Merryman

Date: 7/30/2015 10:05:00 AM

A deeply moving write, Eileen! Your emotions come through loud and clear. Love, Kim

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/31/2015 12:32:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Kim. :) You are sweet. Hope to visit you soon!

Anu Nayak

Date: 7/30/2015 9:23:00 AM

Hello Eileen Manassian, Very deep meaning of pain is shown in your pain....i wish......love gain entry..... A citadel well built... Nice and touching poem, i loved it dear Love n' luck Anulaxmi

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/31/2015 12:34:00 AM

Thank you Anula, for your visit. Very kind words you've penned here. I will be by to visit you soon.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/30/2015 8:59:00 AM

Many fortify their hearts and no love is able to pass through that barrier. This is a sad one.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/31/2015 12:29:00 AM

Yes....Richard. A heart only has enough place for people who are genuine and true. It doesn't help to be too trusting. Thanks for your visit, dear. You know where your place is.