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Circles 2009

Bare foot and tattooed I saw you sat On an empty porch step Blaring out Clair de Lune As usual Controversial and repetitive These are the lives we live In order to be different Couldn't we just, Remain the same? In order to evoke a change So where were you going? I saw you hurrying When you knew the march was on Head down and smirking Walking against the crowds Trying too hard to look; Humbled and forlorn Chasing 'round and around Like a pair of fools If I’d known you’d follow me, I’d never have followed you!

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Date: 12/2/2009 2:38:00 PM
Awesome poem, Naomi! I don't think I've read much of your work before, but I'll definitely be on the lookout for it now. I love the way the two of you were "following" each other. Sounds like fate needed to intervene to bring you together. Great work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/2/2009 1:56:00 PM
Nice write. Keep the magical pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
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Date: 12/1/2009 7:16:00 PM
Thank you-everyone. I think this is the basic outline for something that will eventually be a lot longer-any critique would be greatly appreciated and humbly received!!
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Date: 11/27/2009 6:47:00 PM
Good write, Naomi. Thank you for sharing it! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 11/27/2009 5:29:00 PM
Thank you for a very enjoyable read. Have a wonderful weekend. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/27/2009 7:05:00 AM
Clever use of wit and contradictions , Naomi . Nice presentation , so write onnnnnn ...
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Date: 11/26/2009 7:00:00 PM
Beautifully penned. All the best.
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